http://tf2chan.net/workshop/ 1) Don't portmanteau team and class together like that, at least not on this board. In general if the scene is set on one side of the base, you can just use the class names, and then use the opposite team designation where necessary to keep things clear. 2) There are punctuation and spelling errors everywhere. 3) Why is the RED team pausing mid-battle to rape an enemy Scout? There's a war on. They could get themselves killed. Yes, a lot of porn is of the Excuse Plot variety, but at least try to acknowledge that they're also playing death tag in between having sex. 4) Characterization is very weak. Please do more research before continuing this story. I'm not buying anybody's actions or motivations at all.