Named OCs? I’m not a fan of that, especially not when the names are just… weird, and some characters are genderbent without warning, and none of them are anything like the actual TF2 characters as we know them from their Meet The-videos and the comics. Who is ‘Vlad’? I’m guessing the Heavy, who’s apparently Romanian now, but we never find out. Is Taylor the Scout? Not a clue. It doesn’t really matter anyway, since every single one of them is really a Mary-Sue. Also, the story itself is just badly written. Parts of it doesn’t make any sense, other parts are just plain stupid. "I..want to say.. That I LOOOOVE you all! J-Just..Just-hey, stop laughing! Stop that before I..Ah screw you.. I'm thanking you..HIC!..guys for.. being..good friendsh.. HIC!†This is what people who’ve never been drunk think drunk people sound like. ‘HIC!’ Seriously? “H-Hey.. Bugs-Flynn!â€, everyone exploded into laughter, apparently it sounds like Ariene had just said “Bugs Flying!â€. Is this supposed to be funny to us? Because it isn’t. her drunken eyes and long, adolescent stare Adolescent (n): A young person who has undergone puberty but who has not reached full maturity; a teenager. Underage b&? inhaling a fistful of air How does that even work? This only made him grip her thighs and press his ‘scope’ against her. No. Especially with the inverted commas? Just no. she was the most mature and innocent out of everyone How does that even work? any time she could take out of her time to help heal and bandage up the other team mates was every single second. …what? I don’t want to discourage anyone from writing, God knows I make mistakes of my own, but this fic just isn’t okay to inflict on your readers. If you want to write original ka~waii-uuguu fiction, that’s your own business but please post it somewhere else, and if you want to write TF2 fanfiction, go watch the Meet The-videos on YouTube, read the comics over on the official TF2 page, and then try again from scratch. This, whatever it is, just doesn’t work, I’m sorry to say.