>>17 Nobody here said they wanted to masturbate to your story, at least not as far as I can see. And even if they did, hey, it happens when you write smutty scenes. Sometimes. If they're good. And sometimes even if they're not. But still, it shouldn't surprise you, especially on a site like this, where the front page says "Trembling enthusiasm over exposed flesh". Sounds like a bit of a clue, aye? Anyways, I'm on the 'this needs a lot of work but might be good if you really fixed it up' bandwagon, personally. Keep plugging away. You'll get it eventually.