>>7 I honestly think that needs to be the chan's new motto: "GOOD THINKING, TEAM. SPY-CHECK HIM FIRST, THEN GRAB HIS DICK." Or the motto for Afanfic. Whichever one wins a game of Gay Chicken can be the victor! ... Or maybe as the consolation prize since the winner is actually the loser of Gay Chicken. Or something. Gay Chicken is confusing. We need some afanfic involving it. >>8 I like the idea that the team is willing to try being more of a team. They kind of have to. Bickering constantly and no one ever working together would keep them from getting anywhere so it's perfectly reasonable if some of them would be willing to follow along with Soldier's ideas to see if they help. After all, most of these guys probably worked solo on their previous jobs so getting them to work together over time was probably no easy feat and would explain why the Administrator is constantly disappointed in them. I mean, I highly doubt they were trained in teamwork and had to figure these things out on their own over time. Not to mention, poor Soldier doesn't get to order people around too often and have them listen. I would love to see more stories where they take Soldier at least seriously enough to listen to him, even if he is crazy, and he is actively building up teamwork amongst them. Maybe there are a hundred stories like that out there somewhere but, if so, I have missed all of them. D: Not to mention, Soldier may be crazy but most of them aren't too sane either. Soldier's just the most obvious headcase so of course they're a little more accepting of him than most people would be. Of course, asking for something sexual if they aren't interested at all is, taken on a more serious level, exceptionally harder for them to deal with. The point of this story was for the sake of humor though (and I love me some humor in my porn) so I'll readily play along with the idea that they were all interested to some degree and that no one had trouble staying hard while being palmed by a guy they might find annoying during their day job. Out of curiosity, what are your personal pairings? I had a guess that might be why you arranged them as you did. Then again, who wouldn't lean towards their preferences while writing an orgy? It's like writing any other pairings in that respect. I definitely understand about being leery of repetition btw and I thought it was pretty tasty as is. Though I so wish you would write another extra scene or something with the cigar now. Also, I will love you forever if you write more Soldier stories in general. I love Soldier, especially when he's presented as a decent strategist (which is why I was so pleased when his logic made perfect sense.) I also love it when he's played up strongly for humor or drama (two sides of the same coin.) Not to mention, it'll be a good way to improve? I wish I could give suggestions for how but alas I don't know. I guess perhaps just try and see what unlikely places the humor may take you? >>10 That is hilarious and awesome. I just want to say, I've loved every little instance of people writing about/drawing the TF2 teams (or just a handful of characters) engaging in paintball and water fights. So that image of white paint and your misfortune made me think of one of the guys being shot in the crotch (most likely by Scout) and now I want more.