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Well, here it is, TNI's new (and hopefully more permanent) thread, starting with Chapter 13! These things are getting pretty long, so I might end up merging some chapters when I edit and finalise everything after TNI's ending. But for now, enjoy this 5000-word monstrosity.

If you've just started reading, all the previous chapters are hosted here: http://eximplode.livejournal.com/

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Spy watched from the corner, holding his breath until his counterpart cloaked, disappearing from his view. He’d disguised as the enemy plenty of times, imitating every little habit and gesture to blend in perfectly among their ranks, but something about the BLU Spy had unnerved him from the moment he’d set foot in the building. The way those sunken, haunted eyes had stared into their Medic’s... the unfortunate man had been completely paralysed, his eyes wide open and his body un-moving, a look of sheer horror on his face. Until finally, his attacker grinned, one hand pushing his head down so he kneeled before him, the knife severing the spinal cord in a single, swift motion. No scream, barely a drop of blood...a kill almost too clean. And he’d escaped, chuckling, wearing his victim’s identity not like a disguise but like a second skin.

“SCREAMIN’ EAGLES!”

He checked his watch, the faintly glowing bar slowly increasing, as Soldier charged past. He’d had doubts about dusting off his rarely used Cloak And Dagger to try and capture behind the enemy’s lines, but his instincts had paid off... just not in the way he had expected. Instead, he was using it to hide undetected, trying to suppress the rising panic as Soldier’s rocket barrage exploded uselessly against the enemy Heavy’s silver skin. They weren’t the only ones with “gifts”? The incident at Nucleus had somehow happened twice, apparently un-noticed by both companies? But then, it seemed the Announcer herself had been largely replaced with pre-recorded messages, and his generous paychecks were paid directly into his multiple off-shore accounts by computers. Who knew if there were any real human beings watching them any more, if anyone from RED or BLU would ever notice what was going on...

His cloak fully recharged, Spy ran forward, dodging the shrapnel from his team-mate’s unwitting but welcome distraction. Flattening himself against the opposite wall, it was growing increasingly difficult to maintain his professionalism, to not give in to fear, as the metal giant calmly reached forward and picked up Soldier by the throat. Bone and cartilage crunched and snapped, blood spurted between powerful fingers, and a lifeless body fell to the ground as he released his grip. Silent and almost robotic in his duties, the BLU Heavy gave Soldier little more than a cursory glance before moving on, the capture point now under his team’s control.

“Time has been added.”

Spy dropped his cigarette with shaking fingers, extinguishing it with his heel. He stared at the burnt-out stub, trying not to make comparisons between it and what the enemy would do to him, if he was discovered. He opened his disguise kit, selecting another cigarette and unfolding a mask. A paper-thin piece of cutting-edge technology, nearly useless against a metal monster, a sickly creature with some kind of hypnotic ability...and a ghost. He couldn’t help but smirk a little as he selected the BLU Medic; he wouldn’t seem out of place appearing from thin air. Maybe he could turn this whole thing around, use the enemy team’s superhuman abilities to his advantage. He’d just have to be careful when choosing his prey. And hearing a grumble from the balcony ahead, he may have just found it.

Still cloaked, he glanced around the corner, and his heart soared. The BLU Sniper’s back was fully exposed, his eye pressed to his scope... such a beautiful sight. A man so completely distracted wouldn’t know what hit him until he suddenly woke up to sterile white walls. But he had to exercise caution; if he didn’t wait, if he didn’t analyse his target for signs of superhuman ability, he could end up with a face full of acid or a psychic bullet through the heart. And yet, as far as he could see, the only thing setting the Sniper apart were some tattoos, just barely visible under the excessive arm hair so typical of Australians. Unable to wait any longer, he flicked open his butterfly knife, and raised his arm for a backstab... superhuman abilities or no, he’d die just the same...

There was a sickening crunch as the bones in Spy’s arm broke, his knife embedding itself in the floorboards beneath as he lost the feeling in his hand. The BLU Sniper grinned horribly; beads of saliva dripped from his chin, his lower jaw jutting out, predatory fangs overlapping his top lip. Yellow eyes hungrily looked him over. And the creature’s nostrils flared, taking deep sniffs right next to his neck, his whole body shuddering as a sound somewhere between a growl and a purr emanated from its throat.

But with the adrenaline coursing through him, making the excruciating pain from his useless arm seem miles away, Spy managed to twist in the creature’s grip, snatching up his knife with his left hand. He slashed at his attacker in a wide arc, the illusion of the BLU Medic disappearing like smoke as blood splattered and the BLU Sniper howled in pain. Falling heavily against the wall, he could see his enemy’s shirt slashed open, fingers with sharp, pointed nails clutching at the open wound across its chest. Those markings weren’t tattoos, but stripes, the hairs themselves forming the pattern, forming a dense carpet of brown and black under the creature’s clothes. A half-human animal. And the human aspect was diminishing as he watched, muscles muscles bulging and re-arranging under its skin, its cries of pain deepening as its ribs cracked and expanded. Powerful hands, paw-pads emerging from thickening fingers, tore away the remains of the BLU Sniper’s shirt.

Clutching his arm and trying to push away the encroaching pain, Spy dragged himself into the corner. The creature fell to its knees, its back arching as its spine visibly shifted under its skin, a long and pointed tail tearing through fabric like wet paper. He tapped the display of the Cloak and Dagger... the device gave off a few weak sparks, and the cloak meter flashed on and off in its death throes before it faded to black. The BLU Sniper was still caught in the painful transformation, still screaming. Not like a wounded beast, but in a way that was still far too human... he still had time to escape.

Spy pulled out his disguise kit so quickly he almost tore the delicate silk pocket, then almost dropped this precious last resort as he realised his hands were gone. A glitch with his watch? But it was completely dead... and the effect was quite odd, not cloaking him all at once, but spreading like his arms were being slowly immersed in invisibility paint. Was he doing this? Bending light around himself, or matching his own colours to the background like a human chameleon? All he’d done was really want to disappear, just think about disappearing and - yes! He was completely invisible, with no need for one of those unreliable watches-!

A very animal-like growl snapped Spy out of his momentary euphoria. The creature’s skull had begun to change shape, canine teeth lengthening to match its dog-like snout. He still needed to get away, he couldn’t stay here and watch as his enemy changed from man to mindless killing machine. But as the creature clutched its head and roared, in his own mind he was back in the respawn room just a few days ago. Watching as their Engineer suffered the same inhuman transformations, watching as his eyes pleaded with him. Unable to even touch him, to help relieve his pain in any way... a prisoner of his own cowardice. Watching his enemy writhe there on the floor, clawing at itself as fur sprouted from its skin, he looked at the knife in his hand. A quick cut to sever the spinal cord, that was all it took. A clean, practically painless kill. He owed nothing to this creature. He was simply being professional, it was a mercy killing, a good assassin never let his target die messily...

Blood sprayed in a wide arc again, splattering the wall. His knife slipped from his blood-soaked fingers, slowly rolling to a stop. Spy hardly felt the teeth in his neck as his jugular vein was torn out, the blood loss and shock sending him into an almost dreamlike stupor. Of course... it could still smell me... he mused as the creature viciously tore into his belly, watching as his own guts spilled out , twisting like slimy rope. Even unintentionally, at least the creature had given him the mercy he would have given it, had he only acted more quickly. Invisibility, at a time like this... ? Fate was cruel indeed...

The creature’s claws reached deep inside Spy as his consciousness faded, pulling out handfuls of gore, greedily wolfing down a chunk of still-warm liver. Even though he’d managed to evolve, he’d still found himself at the bottom of the food chain.

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“Time has been added.”

“What!?” Scout glared up at the nearest loudspeaker, stopping somewhere near the ceiling, inside the BLU base. He’d been expecting the others to steamroll all over the other team, and had been hovering over the next control point for the past few minutes. After all, why walk when you can fly? And why wait to capture when you can go on ahead? It was supposed to be an instant win; Spy would be camping out the last control point with his Cloak and Dagger right about now. But thanks to the other guys not doin’ their freakin’ jobs, it was him who ended up lookin’ like a freakin’ idiot! He pressed two fingers to his earpiece, angrily shouting down the microphone; “We lost the middle point already!? The hell is goin’ on out there, you guys?”

Nothing but static answered. Scout gulped nervously, feeling like his stomach just dropped the whole ten feet between him and the ground. What the hell was going on? It couldn’t be the damn earpieces, Engie designed those freakin’ things himself, so tiny you wouldn’t even know you were wearing them. He’d only kept his old one because it meant the other guys couldn’t mute his frequency. Yeah, it had to be someone screwing up, it just had to be. There was no way BLU could come up with something to counter a team of god-damn superheroes! But he still couldn’t ignore that bad feeling in his gut; he was a guy who acted on instinct, and right now his instincts were telling him to screw capping the point and get the hell out of here.

“AGH! What the-!?” Covering his head in fright, Scout’s instincts were re-affirmed as something suddenly embedded itself in the front of the BLU base, just inches from where he was floating. Something fell out of the crater as he turned around, dropping to the floor and harmlessly rolling along... although it was a bit charred, he recognised the white leather, the distinctive pattern of stitches... a baseball?

“GOTTHEBALLBACK!” Something blue streaked past, leaving a trail of dust, and no baseball. The wall of the enemy base cracked, leaving another crater as a pair of feet impacted it at hyper-speed, lithe body twisting in the air as it jumped off the wall. And a pair of running shoes smoked as they screeched to a stop, the BLU Scout grinning up at him. Somehow, it looked like his whole body was moving even though he was standing still, a flickering TV image made real. Even his voice sounded distorted, like there was more than one BLU Scout yelling up to him; “Well if it ain’t the freakin’ FLY BOY! Bet ya think you’re hot shit, don’cha, floatin’ up there like freakin’ Superman!?”

Scout stared down at his counterpart. The smug bastard was moving fast, but not like any Bonk! effect he’d ever seen. Shit. The freakin’ BLUs have powers too!? This was bad, real bad. He should be wetting his pants right about now. And yet, he grinned widely; Oh man. This is AWESOME! I have a freakin’ nemesis, just like in the comic books!

“WOAH!” Scout quickly dodged to the left as the baseball sped past him again, more debris falling from the abused wall as it completely embedded itself in the smooth concrete. If it wasn’t for his quick reflexes, the freakin’ thing would’ve gone right through him. “HEY! We gonna do this right, or what!? Trash talk comes first, THEN you try ‘an kill me!”

The BLU just grinned, becoming nothing more than a streak of colour as he shot forward. As Scout watched dumbfounded, he ran straight up the wall - He stole MY freakin’ trick!? - and with a sound like a cannon, left another impact crater as he kick-flipped off it. Scout’s body reacted faster than his mind could; he suddenly felt a crushing weight, like his whole body was made of lead. Something clipped the side of his head as he dropped like a stone, the sensation less like falling and more like something was pulling him to the floor. The ground cracked beneath his feet as he landed, and he fell forward, winded by the weight of his own body. He wondered for a moment how Heavy dealt with being so... heavy, his opponent skidding to a halt some distance away.

“Owww... shit, man...” Every bone in his body ached in protest as he stood up slowly, his personal gravity thankfully returning to normal; he really didn’t want to do that again. But as he felt the blood trickling down the side of his face, and realised the BLU Scout just took a chunk out of his ear with a wooden bat, he figured things could have been a lot worse.

“SHIT!” he yelled, narrowly avoiding another potentially-fatal blow by tripping over his own feet, but the BLU Scout was already laughing wildly as he came charging at him a second time. Without even thinking about it, Scout shot into the air like a rocket, cheating death yet again. But how the hell was he supposed to hit this guy!? Maybe if he got him someplace less open, he’d be more likely to smack into a wall, or something...

“Hey, Speedy Gonzales! Catch me if ya can!” Scout shouted as he flew towards the central point’s lower entrance. A glance over his shoulder confirmed the BLU was following him, running on the water like it was just different-colored ground, jumping over the stationary train cars in fast-motion. All he had to do was get inside and they’d be surrounded by concrete and train cars and metal walkways, and that BLU bastard would slam right into them. A sharp mid-air turn and he was headed for the middle point... and ended up slamming straight into something himself, stars flashing in front of his eyes as he collapsed in a heap. Who the hell put a big red rock on the freakin’ point... ? The rock moved, seeming to sprout a red rubber arm and a gloved hand to pick him up, before shaking Scout to his senses.

“Pyro?” The smoked glass circles of the rubber mask looked right into his eyes, and he had no idea how, but they looked afraid. They weren’t even eyes, but he could see the fear in them... and the reflection of something big and blue with glowing eyes standing across the walkway, growing bigger as it came rushing towards them. “LOOK OUT!”

Scout closed his eyes, held his breath, and stuck out his arms to both sides. He knew it was useless, he was just gonna be a greasy smear on the BLU-owned control point. But the familiar feeling of dying and respawning failed to come. Instead he felt like he had some kind of rope attached to each hand, only they were like a part of him, somehow responding to the slightest movements of his arm. He’d had the same weird feeling on Teufort’s battlements, just briefly, when he’d stuck the BLU Soldier to the ceiling. And he opened his eyes to the other Scout filling the air with a stream of curse words, which got faster and faster as his arms and legs pinwheeled uselessly in mid-air. Looking to his other side he saw the BLU Pyro, eyes glowing like windows to a furnace, flames flaring from small tears in his rubber suit, rubber gloves squeaking in frustration as he tightened his fists. It would have been a terrifying sight, if he hadn’t been floating above them like some kind of zeppelin.

“Woah. You seein’ this, Py!? I got these chuckleheads right where I want ‘em!” Scout grinned, the two infuriated BLUs bumping together like a pair of balloons as he pulled their invisible strings. He laughed, putting on his best Southern drawl as he mimicked their Engineer; “Yew go ahead an’ get that lil’ ol’ Backburner, and we’ll dun have arrselves a lil’ bar-bee-cue!” Pyro just shook his head in response, grabbing him suddenly in a tight hug.

“What the hell’s got inta you, ya crazy-!?” Scout started to protest, trying to push the Orangutan off him. But suddenly, the answer hit; Pyro didn’t have his Backburner. He didn’t have his Flamethrower either, and Pyro never abandoned his weapon of choice. The few times it’d been knocked from his hands, he’d seen the poor bastard get blown up, run over, and chopped into pieces just to try and get it back. If he’d left it behind... he looked up at the BLU Pyro, the fire pouring from his body forming tendrils that flailed and turned the air around the point into an oven. Shit. Scout felt like he’d just sunk through the floor; what use was a flamethrower against another Pyro, especially one who controlled fire... ?

“YOUTHINKYOUGOTUSFLYBOY!?” The BLU Scout yelled, breaking his long chain of profanity with a grin, rotating slowly in mid air, but rapidly gaining speed. In just a few seconds, his speedy counterpart was a human tornado, pulling the BLU Pyro into the vortex. The floating firestarter greeted his team-mate with open arms, his flames drawn into the spinning air. “GETTALOADATHIS!”

“COME ON!” Scout didn’t hear Pyro transform over the roar of combusting air, but he felt something small cling to his shoulder as he jumped off the point, just as it was obscured by a towering pillar of flame that scorched the ceiling. Great, just great... new freakin’ powers, and what do they get me? Only a huge-ass FIRE TORNADO. he thought, looking over his shoulder at the vortex of flames right behind them. Not only was it was following them, it was close enough that he could feel the heat burning the back of his neck. He could still hear the BLU Scout in the center of it, laughing like crazy even as he roasted like a Thanksgiving turkey... had the whole enemy team gone freakin’ nuts!?

After what seemed like miles of flying he finally shot through the lower exit, back on the RED side, back in the relatively cool outside air. Flames belched from the doorway like the mouth of a dragon, the huge blast of hot air throwing off Scout’s flight pattern and sending him to the floor. He spat out a broken tooth as he sat up, unloading his pistol into the wall of fire as the the taste of blood filled his mouth; he wasn’t going to just lay there and wait to die. He just hoped Pyro managed to get away, somehow.

Then suddenly, 200 tons of fully-automated steel plunged straight into the inferno, the train’s horn cut short as the front end exploded in a shower of molten metal. Whatever was left of it immediately de-railed, wheels spraying fountains of sparks as they ploughed through part of the wall, more sounds of tortured metal coming from within the central point building. And when it finally stopped, it left an eerie silence, broken only by the crackle of flames and the occasional piece of falling debris.

“Holy shit...” Scout said breathlessly, crossing himself. It was an old habit, something he hadn’t done since he was a good god-fearing little Catholic boy. But given what just happened, he was surprised he hadn’t fallen to his knees and started speaking in tongues. They were gone. Both superpowered BLUs, dead, by either sheer dumb luck or act of God. Then again, it didn’t mean a damn thing if they still killed- “Pyro? Is ...izzat you?”

He hadn’t noticed until now, but there was a little Salamander clinging to his shoulder. And it was real weird-looking, not like any he’d ever seen; its body was firetruck red, but its head and legs were a sooty black. It stared into his eyes with its dark, glassy lizard eyes... and nodded in response.

“Aw, man, Py... losin’ ya weapon and ya suit in the same day?” Scout smiled, petting the tiny creature on the head with his finger as he got up. “Heh. That sucks. Well, things can only get better from here, I guess. I mean... we... kinda won. Sorta. For now. We should prob’ly go defend the next point though, right?” Pyro nodded, as meaningfully as a Salamander could. Then suddenly, there was a loud sizzling noise, followed by a deafening crash, as part of the train fell to the floor.

There was no way. There was no freakin’ way. A huge hole suddenly appeared before Scout’s eyes, burning right through the wrecked train from within. Molten metal dripped from an emerging humanoid figure, burning the ground wherever it dropped. It was only recognisable as the BLU Pyro from the bubbling remnants of the fire-retardant suit clinging to its back, dripping to the floor, forming long sticky strands with each step. Red-hot molten glass wept from the eyes of a melting rubber mask, and under that, there was no face. There was only fire; a body made entirely of living embers, feather-like tendrils of flame fluttering in the breeze. It clutched a girder in its glowing fists, super-heated steel dripping between its fingers as it swung it towards him...

“JESUS CHRIST!” Scout jumped backwards, feeling Pyro fall from his shoulder. He looked around to see where the Salamander went, but was forced to take to the air as the BLU Pyro dragged its massive weapon along the floor, taking another swing at him. Scout’s hands shook as he tried to take aim, and unloaded a whole Scattergun clip into the creature’s chest. But the pellets liquefied before they even hit, dripping like water off the monster’s body.

The BLU Pyro dropped the girder - now almost completely melted through - and picked up a handful of red-hot metal, winding up the pitch. Scout pulled out his bat almost reflexively, sweat gathering on his brow as he prepared to hit the home run that’d save his life. Then from somewhere below, there was a sound like someone squeezing a bag of meat, and a full-grown Elephant suddenly slammed head-first into the fiery creature. Pinned to the end of a nearby train car, the paint instantly started to peel and burn from the incredible heat... but it was the smell of burning hair and meat that floated up to Scout.

“PYRO, WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOIN’!? FREAKIN’RUN! ... Just... just freakin’ run... !” Scout trailed off. Oh God. Oh Christ. Pyro was letting himself get cooked alive, changing and squishing through a menagerie of animals, constantly shape-shifting to replace his burnt flesh. All so he wouldn’t die yet, freakin’ killing himself just so he could get away... “...Crazy bastard...”

The BLU Pyro’s hand shot forward, gripping the shifting mass of animal parts where its throat probably was, flesh and bone melting and smoking beneath its fingers. Scout bit his lip and flew as fast as he could towards the RED base, the door snapping shut just as a gunshot rang out.

“Doc! Oh man, am I ever glad to see you-!”

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Another perfect headshot. Right between where its eyes were supposed to be, lava-like blood splattering. It didn’t kill it outright - he’d seen Scout and poor Pyro fighting that thing - but it was enough to make it stumble and fall into the water. Steam screamed from the depths of the moat, the water boiling instantly as it plunged in, the blackened remains of the burning creature floating on the surface like charcoal.

Wordlessly, Sniper reloaded his rifle and peered through his scope, far away from the BLU team and their new ‘gifts’, peering through an open window at the very top of the base. It was amazing how accurate your shots could be when you were fighting against monsters and madmen. He’d already taken down a blood-stained, tiger-striped beast that came charging out from the central point. He hadn’t even realised it used to the enemy Sniper until the dead body changed from animal to human, right before his eyes. And then there was that thing he’d just shot, that used to be the BLU Pyro...

No. He couldn’t let his mind wander from the task at hand... but, Christ, could that be him one day? His power over plants just kept growing stronger. He’d gone from branches sprouting uncontrollably from the floorboards, to feeling the potential for growth in every seed, in just a few days. That very morning, he’d been daydreaming about home, and somehow sprouted a flower with petals the colour of Outback sand, filling the air with the sweet, coconutty scent of Anzac biscuits. It had to be too much, all of this happening in such a short time. At the rate this was going, he could wake up one day with green skin and an inexplicable need to sunbathe. Or worse, he thought, the vivid nightmare of the desert still all too fresh in his mind.

“Alert! Our control point is being captured!”

Piss. Scout was still down there; he’d seen the little runt shoot back into the base mere moments ago, and normally he would have left it at that. It wasn’t his job to stand on control points, he was more valuable taking down incoming enemies... but he sighed as he took the Tribalman’s Shiv from his belt. The ridged pattern on the back of the wooden blade morphed into dangerously curved thorns as he turned to leave. I must be bleedin’ mad, doin’ this...

“Urkk-!” He cried involuntarily, suddenly finding his chin resting on another man’s shoulder. The smell of blood and antiseptic stung his nose, and his breath caught in his throat as he realised whose shoulder it was.

“Shhh...” The BLU Medic whispered in Sniper’s ear. Fingers clad in thick rubber gloves stroked through his hair, making every muscle in his body tense up.

Sniper took a labored breath, another choking noise escaping his throat as his mind struggled to grasp the reality of the situation. The BLU Medic had somehow managed to sneak up on him, stabbing him through the gut with... oh God, he could feel something moving in there. Waves of pain coursed through him as he tried to pull himself away, catching sight of the Medic’s translucent forearm, hand and wrist buried in his abdomen. He retched as the man aggressively thrust forward, penetrating deep into him, impaling his whole body on his arm without a single drop of blood. Exploring fingers worked their way past his intestines, agony flaring like fireworks as they brushed past his liver, a fingertip delicately tracing the shape of his kidneys. He felt the man smirk into his neck as they ran themselves along his spine - from the inside - making his helpless body twitch like a puppet.

“Ah... dein Herz... it is beating so fast for me...” The Medic said almost breathlessly, cupping the rapidly beating heart in his palm, his body pressed so close to Sniper’s it was like he was trying to climb into him. “And such strong lungs... so much like his...”

Sniper coughed violently, biting his own tongue until he tasted blood. If just for a moment, the sharp pain distracted from the excruciating sensations in his chest. That BLU bastard wasn’t going to let him die yet. Vines emerged from he wooden floorboards and twisted slowly around the handle of his fallen Shiv. He just had to get it off the floor, just a little closer to his hand... but it slipped as he let out a strangled scream. The Medic’s other arm plunged into his chest, his body slowly disappearing, the bloodstained white coat fading away until only his psychotically smiling head remained. Sniper closed his eyes, waiting for it to end.

BANG. Falling heavily to the floor and gasping for breath, his lungs still convinced they’d been torn into by a madman’s hands, it took him a moment to realise it really had ended. The BLU Medic’s entirely solid corpse lay on the floor, a neat bullet hole right through his head. He kicked the body as hard as he could between coughing fits; such a precision shot would make any professional proud, if he hadn’t wanted that twisted bastard to suffer just as much as he did.

“You really need to pay more attention to your surroundings, Bushman.” Spy calmly slipped his Ambassador back into his jacket, lighting a fresh cigarette as he looked down his nose at his team-mate. His pointed shoe knocked the now-empty canister to one side as he stepped forward, offering his hand to help the other man up.

Sniper declined; swatting Spy’s hand away with a growl , he grabbed his Shiv and started running. The point hadn’t been captured yet, there might just be time to stop BLU’s relentless advance. Jumping down behind the point, a series of twisted roots sprouted from the floorboards, letting him slide the rest of the way to the concrete below. Behind him, he could hear Spy taking the stairs, and saw Scout floating just above the point, facing away from him. “What the bloody hell are you doin’? Stand ON the point, you wanker!”

“The enemy has received additional time!”

Scout dropped to the floor instantly, the point now under BLU control, and Sniper could do nothing but stare. He was dead. A gaping, bleeding hole right though the middle of his chest, his heart torn out and discarded a few feet away, like a piece of trash. It looked like the BLU Medic’s work, but he’d just seen him die... and where did that pool of blood suddenly come from? Scout looked like he’d been dead a good few minutes, and yet he’d been floating there just a second ago...

“EURGH! What is zees?” Spy complained loudly. Sniper turned around, and watched as the man wiped a thick, black fluid from his jacket lapel. Then just as suddenly, more of the same fell onto his hat, fat drops with an oil-like sheen gathering on the brim and splashing onto the floor. He looked up, and immediately wished he hadn’t; an entire web of the stuff covered the ceiling directly above the point. And in the middle of the web was an enormous spider, the size of a full-grown man, abdomen patterned with blue pinstripes. With a series of cracking noises, the creature’s human-like head turned a full 180 degrees, a multitude of black eyes staring hungrily at both of them. It grinned, revealing a mouth with two especially long, hollow, venom-injecting fangs.

“Bonjour~” said the BLU Spy, cheerfully.
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>> No. 244
I'm beginning to read this story on the livejournal link, but for some reason I cannot click Chapter 3. Not sure if it's just my computer. I was wondering if you could check it out. Please and thank you.
>> No. 245
>>17
A lot of this sounds like an exaggerated version of the "problems" (in quotations because, really, they're not big enough to warrant concern) I have with this story, including some things that aren't even right. For example, the number-typing thing: I don't know of any style/format (e.g. MLA) that requires you to type out any number past "nine". In fact, if you're publishing something--especially in a magazine--they often get a bit pissed off if you type out the number past that. And to imagine doing this into the hundreds! I mean, there's no stylistic rule keeping you from typing it out, but it looks far neater if you use Arabic numerals past "nine".
>> No. 246
>>19

Yeah, that was what I was taught in school. Numbers one through nine are typed out, but anything past 10 is in numerals.
>> No. 247
>>17

Thanks for the crit, anon. I'll definitely take some of your points into consideration, maybe get my betas to look at the dialogue a bit more closely. And I'll fix the caps vs. italics thing in the chapters hosted on LJ, for sure.

That said, though, I think maybe you just don't like the genre of this fic? A story about the RED team getting superpowers is a gimmick, plain and simple, just like the zombies in Respawn Of The Dead. If I wanted to write something that largely stuck to and built on established canon, I'd do that. But right now I just want to write something a bit silly: not for the sake of mass appeal, but because I like doing it.

So, if you don't like the direction I'm taking TNI, feel free to stop reading. I realize this sort of story isn't for everyone.

>>18

I'm not sure if it's ONLY Chapter 3 you couldn't read, but here's a direct link to it anyway: http://eximplode.livejournal.com/1274.html#cutid1

If anyone has any less-glitchy places I could host TNI, I'd appreciate it. Livejournal seems to bug out for certain people, and FF.net is out of the question.
>> No. 248
Scared the hell outta me somethin' fierce. You are a master of suspense and horror, Eximplode. I cannot wait to read more. If I had Garry's Mod, 3Ds Max, and knew how to use them, I would make this entire story into a machinima movie. It deserves it.
>> No. 254
I wanna see a pic of the creepy spyder :D
>> No. 296
I've finally caught up with the entire story, and I must say that you are indeed a very brilliant writer!

Out of all the characters that intrigue me the most the BLU Spy AKA Spycho, is the winner of this title. I mean, he can fuck around with your mind! It's almost like he can sense what you are most afraid of and exploit it against you. Many think that your safe while inside your own mind, but Spycho proves this to be very wrong; if he wants to fuck around with your mind and turn it against you, he'll do it.

I also liked how he is just absolutely fucking TERRIFYING looking while he tortures his victims.


I hope to see more from you, Eximplode. I can't take the cliffhanger! It's killing me!
>> No. 299
Kind of agree its dragging out -- I think maybe the introductions could have been compressed or something for both sides. I mean, you have eighteen people to cover. It was compelling when you kept it to the RED team, now it just feels a bit stale on the intros for the BLUs.

With eighteen unique characters/situations AND a plot (which is terrific, btw) I don't feel like you have the luxury of big intros and development for literally everyone.
>> No. 301
@25
Lies. More words is always better.
>> No. 302
>>26

I concur; less words means you have a piece of crap that nobody wants to read. I love reading long stories like this one.

>>25

The current introductions to the BLU Team are actually brilliantly written; I honestly didn't expect them to obtain their own powers, so it surprised me greatly and sucked me further into the story Their introductions are meant to surprise you and even dumbfound you!
>> No. 310
>>27

Yeah, it's true, but the best way to do it is to do it quickly I think in this kind of scenario -- to startle one's audience out of complacency.

And as for words, well words are only worth reading if they mean something or feel like it's going somewhere. Otherwise it's like wading through mud. A short piece no-one might not want to read, but they'll read it, even if it's by accident.

There can be a nice middle ground, you know. And it was occupying it for a long time, now... yeah. Anyway, made my point, so I will just leave it there.

Do love the gist of the fic and it really did hook me in at the start. Surprised it took someone so long to make a quality piece with the concept (or come up with the concept). It works really well with the original material.
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>> No. 398
A TNI update the same day as a TF2 update? And I finally manage to get this thing done after cutting out huge chunks, completely reworking existing stuff, and waiting for my betas to finish their finals? Must be an Australian Christmas miracle.

Anyway, hope you guys like this. And I might just put together a non-TNI-canon Christmas Special for you all, too. So look out for that. :3

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“I really don’t know how to thank you enough, mes amis.” The creature dropped from the ceiling. The men hardly had time to notice that its spindly rear legs had snapped the thick support threads, before the whole web dropped like a net. “Disposing of zat annoying Medic on our team, who dared to ruin my fun vis your Scout...”

Ignoring all concerns about his suit, Spy tried to pull the sticky webbing off Sniper as he desperately reached forward for help, but his team-mate’s cry was silenced as the web smothered him completely. The substance hardened within seconds, losing its greasy sheen, making an ugly black statue of what was once a man. Turning on the creature, Spy pulled out his Ambassador and fired. But the weapon changed as soon as he pulled the trigger, flowing between his fingers like molasses and falling uselessly to the floor. Drawing his knife as the monster approached, the diamond-shaped blade reared up at him, the point opening up to hiss at him angrily. He threw the thing away, staring in disbelief as the silver scaled snake slithered away, dragging the balisong’s foldable handle behind it like some kind of clattering rattle.

“But why waste time frightening a poor, ‘elpless leetle bunny when I can take on a truly worthy opponent?” The BLU simply laughed at Spy’s confusion as its arachnid body melted into a formless mass of tar. Dripping claws brought a single cigarette to a mouth full of jagged teeth, and with a sound like a blocked drain, it took a long drag.

Spy took a step backwards as his enemy exhaled a thick, fog-like smoke. And immediately he froze in place, suddenly aware of the nothingness behind him. Merde. This couldn’t be real, he knew that much. Nothing could be so powerful as to bend and change reality to its own will. He was being drugged, or hypnotised, just like Medic. But whatever this creature’s mind-tricks were, he was already in too deep. He took a quick glance down to make sure, but he could feel the gaping chasm just inches away, sucking in every bit of heat, a small pebble echoing as it bounced off its walls. It couldn’t possibly exist, and yet every one of his senses was telling him it did. He frantically tried to recall the yellowed pages of the Gentlemanne’s Guide to Surviving Capture and Interrogation, specifically the part on torture. Make a safe place in your mind, retreat into a fantasy or a fond memory, just go there...

The world shattered around him. For a few moments, Spy was suspended in a void of endless white. But the pieces gradually came back together, a solid floor materialising beneath him, his gloved fingers finding dew-covered grass as he landed with cat-like agility. And plank by plank, brick by brick, the slanted roof and shuttered windows of his childhood home materialised in front of him like an explosion in reverse. He took a deep breath, gathering his thoughts. He didn’t know if that monster’s influence would eventually catch up with him, or if it would get bored searching for this little enclosed area of his mind. But for now, it was a perfect Summer’s day on his little island of familiarity, his safe place, unchanging and incorruptible. Mama’s flowerbeds were in full bloom, the blossoms gently nodding in the breeze. If he listened closely, he could hear her in the kitchen, humming as she cooked lunch.

He frowned, pushing the door cautiously open with a fingertip. The place was just like he remembered, from the white-painted cabinets to the ever-present vase of flowers on the table, to the smell of his mother’s apple tart. Even with her back turned to him, he could see she was as young and beautiful as when he was a child. And always, always busy. Her home-made pastries provided a much-needed boost to their meagre income. He casually picked up a butter knife, catching a brief flicker of something out of place before his reflection appeared in the metal. Ultimately, it was one’s experiences, one’s memories that defined oneself. Playing alone in the house and in the garden, he’d grown up with little need for emotional attachments, a healthy imagination, and an incredible eye for detail. Taking aim, he threw the knife at the back of his mother’s head.

The blade embedded itself in her skull with a dull ‘thunk’, sticking rigidly out from her caramel-coloured locks. The Gentlemanne’s Guide put great emphasis on being alone in your safe place. Your own memories and perceptions could easily be turned against you, unless you completely isolated yourself. Thick black blood began to ooze from the BLU Spy’s wound, its head twisting round to face him. “How dare you do that to your own MOTHER!”

His foe transformed quickly, its face stretching and morphing into a curved beak, his mother’s dress forming tattered wings. Painted nails curled into talons as the creature leaped at him. Spy threw himself to the floor, and his mother’s china shattered as his monstrous counterpart plunged straight into an ornate wooden cabinet. He picked up the same tiny chair he’d sat in years ago, but felt its weight change in his hands, becoming light, flimsy cardboard as soon as he brought it down onto the BLU Spy’s head. How can this be happening? was all he could think as he reached for the hatstand, only for his hand to collide with a hanging sheet. Moments ago it’d been real, but now it was just a painting on a stage background. All around him, furniture was suddenly cardboard and plywood. All false. All useless.

Spy angrily tore down the fabric in front of him; this was supposed to be his world, he was supposed to have the upper hand! He immediately turned on the BLU Spy, still bent over in the broken remains of the china cabinet, chuckling to itself. His hands tightened around its neck as he furiously dragged it to its feet.

“Fils de salope-!/” he growled as he found himself looking into a pair of button eyes and a stitched-on mouth. The low chuckling rose to an insane cackle as he dropped the straw-filled decoy, and looked around for his real opponent. “Come out and let us settle thees like gentlemen, you cowardly disgrace of a Spy!”

“What’s ze matter, Moinseur Rouge... ? Does ze truth hurt?” The BLU Spy materialised from the shadows like the Cheshire Cat, grinning as he opened a leather-bound book. “Eet ees razzer impressive, zis web of lies you ‘ave created. Not a seengle soul would ever theenk zat ze mysterious Frenchman is Swiss. Ze land of efficient watches and offshore banking never was zat romantic.”

Spy felt his blood boil as he watched the monster pause, to lick its thumb and turn the page. How could it possibly know-!?

“You were a student in Paris, and began to live a double life as an infamous art thief, for nozzing more zan ze excitement... ‘ow pathetic. You learned to change your identity and resist interrogation in case you were ever caught. Not surprisingly, you were. And when you stole from a certain Administrator’s private collection, you chose to join RED instead of facing your punishment like a man.” The book snapped shut, and the creature smirked horribly. “A common thief wizzout a seengle hour of formal training in ze art of espionage, and yet you call me a disgrace? Oh Moinseur Rouge... what would everyone theenk, if they knew your entire existence was simply a performance?”

The BLU Spy rolled around in hysterical laughter, clutching its sides, taking wheezing breaths between snorts. The curtain was rising on their performance, revealing an audience of shadowy figures. They twisted as Spy looked at them, becoming his parents, his old friends, even his team-mates. All of them looking at him in a mixture of disgust and pity. Spy clutched his head as all those eyes drilled into him, and scores of horrible thoughts and possibilities suddenly invaded his mind. They know. They know you’re a liar, they know you’re a thief and a scoundrel and a fake. Your life wasn’t good enough so you had to invent one, and now they know, they all know...

“So many painful memories, so many lies, all on deesplay for everyone to see... if I only I could ‘elp you, mon ami... per’aps lighten ze load a little...” The creature giggled, hiding its grin behind clawed fingers as it saw Spy’s pained expression. Casually, it tossed the book it had been reading into the fireplace, the title ‘Memories: 1964-Present’ quickly consumed by the flames. “...Ah, doesn’t zat feel so much better... ?”

A strange feeling overcame Spy, and he found himself desperately searching the first few rows of the audience, as the figures started to fade. There had been eight men there, with front-row seats to their unfolding drama. Eight men he knew. Eight men who were important somehow. But their names and faces were slowly consumed by flames as the book burned, the memories crumbling away like burned paper as his mind reached for them. That thing was making him forget... not just the web of lies he’d spun, but everything...

The monster chuckled, another book materialising in its hand, another book thrown to the flames. Oh god. He could feel the years slipping away from him. His suit looked comically large on his suddenly teen-aged body, and as his memories and experiences were undone, so was he. Another book burned. His world shook around him, cracks appearing in walls and ceilings as his mind started to come apart. And he shrank even further as he ran forward, a teenager now just a child tripping over adult-sized clothes. More than two decades of his life had simply ceased to exist. Desperately, Spy clawed his way out of his suit. He had to stop this, before there was nothing left... but he emerged just in time to see more memories go up in flames.

More violent tremors shook his inner world, sending the mirror above the fireplace crashing to the floor. Memories make you who you are, he thought, picking up a mirror shard in his stubby fingers and looking at his face. He’d been reduced to nothing but his earliest memories, his body no more than 4 years old, his shirt now looking more like a nightgown. One last book - that he suddenly found himself gripping close to his chest - was all that stood between him and complete non-existence. With so little to hold it together, his safe place was rotting away around him, and there was nothing he could do to fight it. The monster’s jaws were opening wide, the yawning chasm ready to consume him completely. Tears welled up in his eyes, his tiny body wracked with sobs.

...Mama...

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“I really don’t know how to thank you enough, mes amis.” The creature dropped from the ceiling. The men hardly had time to notice that its spindly rear legs had snapped the thick support threads, before the whole web dropped like a net. “Disposing of zat annoying Medic on our team, who dared to ruin my fun vis your Scout...”

Sniper reached out, trying to pull Spy out of the way. But the whole thing had already landed on top of the man, hardening just as he pulled out his Ambassador. He pulled out his Shiv; “Alroight, come on then! I’ve killed bigger spiders with a rolled-up newspaper than the loiks of-” he stopped mid-sentence. His Shiv was flailing around in his hand, a knot in the wood trying to be an eye, the blade morphing into serrated jaws. He tightened his grip, determined to fight against the living wood... but there was no life in it. The wood was dead, it’d been dead since it was cut from the tree. It couldn’t be moving unless he fed life into it, and yet he could feel it wriggling around in his grip. As he dropped it, it turned into an ugly, saw-toothed fish... still made of wood, with a handle instead of a tail...

“But why waste time frightening a poor, ‘elpless leetle bunny when I can take on a truly worthy opponent?” It laughed, its arachnid body melting into a formless mass of tar. Sniper closed his eyes for a moment. And like spreading branches, his extra senses reached out all around him, feeling the potential for growth. Shutting out the searing white noise from the wooden planks all around him, he focused on the pinpricks of light from the tiniest things, sweeping like galaxies under his feet, forming constellations above ground. Seeds stuck to the bottom of pointed shoes. Sawdust had settled on a set of broad shoulders. And splinters of wood, probably the shrapnel from a missed Scattergun shot, clung to shirt sleeves and jacket lapels, peppering a very distinctive balaclava. The BLU Spy, standing exactly where that monstrous spider was.

With a sound like a blocked drain, the illusion took a drag of its cigarette. Its whole body dissolved into thick smoke, and the world changed.

Walls and floorboards tore themselves free, breaking apart, the pieces floating away as they vanished into thin air. Patches of red dirt blossomed beneath his feet, spreading like giant bloodstains. And above his head, the sun rose to the top of the sky, turning the air stiflingly hot. Sniper wiped the sweat gathering on his forehead; if he closed his eyes, he could feel that everything around him was still the same... so that was it. That was the Spy’s game; he got deep inside your head, changing everything your senses told you. And as he looked at himself, he realised that bastard was even changing him. No matter how much he tried to fight it, he just kept getting shorter and scrawnier, until...

Oh, Christ. He was a kid again, and on the playground no less. He could already hear the taunts of his childhood bullies. Old nightmares crawled out of the depths of his mind, twisting themselves into the shapes of his former classmates, and their taunts of ‘cripple’ and ‘half-breed’, but... no. Sniper closed his eyes, and smiled; No. His palm closed around something that wasn’t there before, something he alone had willed into existence. He wasn’t a bloody kid. Not any more. This part of his life was long since over. He’d spent years wandering the desert in his dreams, and slowly he’d grown to understand. It was his mind that made things real. Whether it was creating a sense of self-worth, or the seed he now held in the palm of his hand, only he controlled his perception of reality. In the past, he’d been content to let his imagination decay, leaving his inner world to become a desolate wasteland.

But that was changing. And he could feel the change through him like electricity, the illusion of a body the Spy had spun around him becoming little more than an empty shell. His fingers reached forward and dug into his former chest from the inside, stretching and tearing at the restrictive skin until he could finally take his first breath. The human-shaped cocoon was left behind as he emerged, stepping out onto the purple sand. The fluid covering his bare skin slowly cooling in the twilight air, Sniper could see things clearly now. His classmates has returned to formless nightmares, their strings pulled by a distant puppeteer. Slowly, they closed in around him, but he held his ground. His fingers toyed with the seed he’d created. Psychedelic flowers forced their way out of the desert soil.

And finally, he dropped it, a gigantic tree shooting into the starry sky and taking him along for the ride. The shadows gave chase, spiralling around the trunk like a plague of locusts, stripping it down to the bare wood. A thick branch twisted in front of Sniper, its growth keeping pace with his barefooted steps as he turned left and right. Where are you, ya bloody spook? he thought, a flurry of brambles tearing apart his pursuers. More of them were coming at him, fanged mouths parroting his father’s lamentations at having a cripple for a son. But an odd-looking fruit shaped itself into a steel blade as he grabbed it, and the new Kukri sliced through them with ease.

The BLU Spy had to be getting desperate. It was digging deeper, trying to find something that’d get to him, even picking up old snippets of overheard conversation. A shadow Scout floated up next to him - “I dunno man, he just doesn’t look like one... ain’t Australians supposed to be all buff an’ manly an’ shit?” - and his Kukri made quick work of it. Fragments of the illusion fell away like dust motes, and slowly re-formed themselves into the familiar shape of the enemy Spy, running away from him. It took hardly a thought to bring trees springing up from the sand, an impenetrable wall surrounding his enemy as they twisted together.

“What’s the matter, mate? I thought you said you wanted a worthy opponent.” Sniper smirked; the trees parted to let him in, and sealed the entrance behind him. A single branch extended, his hat hanging on the end of it, and he put it on without a word as he watched his opponent’s struggles. The BLU Spy frantically clawed at its prison, its shape changing fluidly as Sniper thwarted every attempt at escape. A menagerie of various limbs helped it grapple its way to the roof of the prison, only to be stopped by sword-like thorns and enclosing branches. Trying to squeeze its body though cracks proved equally fruitless; Sniper had the invader completely trapped.

Finally, the weakened Spy dropped heavily to the floor. It took wheezing breaths through sharpened teeth, its pinprick eyes glaring at Sniper as it snarled; “You theenk you’re so good, don’t you!? Trapping me ‘ere, like an animal... if ‘alf of me wasn’t busy fucking around weeth your leetle friend, you would be nothing more zan a mindless cabbage!”

“Wot?” Sniper glared down at the BLU, who just giggled insanely at its own stupid plant joke. A pair of vines twisted around his enemy’s neck, tightening their grip as he tightened his fist in anger. “I don’t know how you can have your filthy fingers in Spy’s mind as well, but you’ll bloody well get out. Now.”

“A good magician never reveals his secrets...” The creature grinned, melting out of the vines’ death-grip and re-forming itself a few feet away. It waved one scrawny arm, and Sniper was suddenly looking through a floating screen. It was slightly curved like the surface of a bubble, and the scene within looked far too real to be just another trick. It was more like a window into a world he didn’t recognise... until he saw Spy. “But zees time, I weel make an exception, mon ami.”

Sniper stared, transfixed, as his team-mate’s nightmare unfolded in front of him. The house in the countryside was very different from his own desert-like mindscape, but it seemed the BLU Spy was trying the same trick in a different mind. Without the extrasensory anchor on reality that he had, the little flickers of plant life telling him all three of their bodies were standing perfectly still, Spy had no way to fight back. He was completely isolated from anything but his own mind. And it was his own mind that was corrupting his memories, making his inner self shrink away until nothing but a pile of clothes remained...

“Quite the show, isn’t eet?” The BLU Spy smirked, suddenly appearing next to Sniper as his gut twisted uneasily. That couldn’t be it, could it? Spy always found a way to weasel his way out of things... “Eet would be so easy to bring ze full force of my wonderous gifts down upon ‘is pathetic leetle mind. Like useeng a sledge ‘ammer to crack an egg.”

“Not if I ‘ave anythin’ to say about it. OI, SPY!” Sniper pressed his hands to the thin barrier that separated their minds. The pile of clothes moved as a young child struggled to free themselves, and he thumped his fists against the rippling surface, doing everything he could to get his team-mate’s attention. The BLU hissed furiously, inhuman appendages trying to pull him away as a look of realisation came over Spy’s face.

Sniper waved his arm. Twisted saplings exploded from the sand, wrapping themselves around the creature’s randomly shapeshifting body and pinning it to the ground. He wasn’t sure if Spy could hear him as he squinted into the fire, but he shouted nonetheless; “Come on! Yer a bloody spy! You can see he’s just playin’ yer own mind against itself!”

Spy braced himself, and plunged both hands into the fire. The other half of the BLU Spy finally caught on, his arm stretching to swipe at the child, but he’d caught on too late. Spy had already plunged his hands into the ‘fire’, only to find it was just fluttering strips of red and yellow paper. He’d retrieved the books, his memories intact but out of reach the entire time. He was an adult again, angry and fully armed, pressing the barrel of his Ambassador to his BLU counterpart’s head.

Then everything happened far too quickly. Acting as one mind again, both BLU Spies panicked, slithering out of their former victims’ grasps and diving straight into the translucent barrier. Their hands touched first as they tried to re-unite themselves, a last-ditch attempt to escape. And everything went horribly, horribly wrong.

Like a dam bursting, their mindscapes flowed into each other, creating twisted hybrids of plants and furniture. Below were varnished planks of sand, and patches of twilight desert scarred with wood grain. Above was a broken patchwork of starry sky and painted ceiling. The two worlds spiralled around each other chaotically to the sound of screaming, but he couldn’t tell if they was his screams or Spy’s. As soon as the barrier broke down, their thoughts, their memories, their selves had met in a violent head-on collision.

The result was almost beyond comprehension; inside their merging minds, their bodies were becoming one, muscle and bone exposed and bleeding as flesh melted into flesh. He couldn’t stop it. He couldn’t even think about stopping it, he was thinking thoughts that were only half his. He felt Spy’s heart beating right next to his own, two stomachs heaving as they saw the world through four eyes. Conflicting memories writhed like mating snakes, people and places changing, sounds and smells flowing together. Their fears and aspirations smashed uncontrollably into each other.

Even the slightest thought shattered under the incredible stress, but one single thing emerged from their clashing minds; they couldn’t possibly survive this. Whatever would be left in the aftermath wouldn’t be Sniper or Spy, but some insane, twisted, pathetic creatures. Both of them too unstable to live, or just driven utterly mad by their own scrambled brains...

Everything stopped.

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The BLU Spy crumpled, a look of complete shock crossing his face before it collided with the concrete.

“An’ tha’s whut ya get fer toochin’ that!”

Demo glared at the man, giving him a good hard kick. His head still felt like it was full of cotton balls, thanks to that bloody Medic and his drugged orange drink. The Doc had tried to keep him quiet because he didn’t want to know the truth, but he’d been determined to find that thing that was lurking in every dark place, and bash its ugly head in. And if the BLU Spy got in the way of his pursuit, and tried to capture their bloody point... well, it was nothing a scrumpy bottle to the kneecaps couldn’t fix.

“Ugh... wha’...” Demo groaned and clutched his head; he’d been fighting off the after-effects of the sedative as he dragged himself out of their barracks and into the main part of the base. Now that feeling of tiredness and nausea was back with a vengeance, and had brought a terrible ringing in his ears along with it. He could hear his own heart pounding. His vision started to blur, the dim lights above his head suddenly blindingly bright and yet so much further away. Everything seemed much further away, too far away...

Two gunshots rang out somewhere in the distance, and he watched as the bodies of Spy and Sniper fell, slowly sinking through molasses-thick air. The BLU Spy’s body flowed as he moved, pieces breaking off and re-forming like a lava lamp. Is it you... who’s been watchin’ all of us... ? Demo thought vaguely as the Spy approached; the creature’s face was just a series of shifting ink blobs, but he was sure it was grinning at him. He could feel its shadowy fingers curiously probing the edges of his mind, gently worming their way in until they found something interesting. Something very interesting, he felt the creature think.

Demo’s breath caught in his throat. That was what it was looking for? He’d never really thought about it before, but now that he was aware of it, he could see it much more clearly in his mind. Something like a door... a door inside his head, reinforced and locked tight. And the Spy was standing right in front of it, examining every inch like some kind of priceless treasure, until it suddenly jammed a corkscrew-shaped claw into the lock. At that moment, a terrible realisation hit, seeping out from edges of the door like smoke.

Oh god. That was what it was for. It wasn’t locked to keep intruders out; it was locked to keep something in. Something his mind had tried to shut away for its own safety. Something wild and terrible that had appeared shortly after the Nucleus Incident. Even an overactive imagination and the twisted logic of a Scrumpy-poisoned mind hadn’t been able to handle it. His own mind had shut it away for its own safety. As the BLU Spy forced its way past his defences, it was starting to leak out.

There was nothing he could do to stop it. The power completely overwhelmed him. There was no time to scream, or even to think. His body and mind unable to contain it, the sudden release of energy escaped any way it possibly could. Rushing out of him like lightning, and grounding itself in the nearest possible conductor; the BLU Spy, one finger still in the lock.

Distantly, Demo felt his body hit the floor. Then, nothing.
>> No. 399
Oh god, the last bit where Spy and Sniper...was like a DMT trip. This is so powerful, it's hard to put into words without sounding gushy.
>> No. 400
A very thrilling chapter!

You again pulled awesomely on the strings of fear, Exi. I really got scared by how Spy lost all the memories he held dear. One of my biggest fears is that I get amnesia or Alzheimers at some point in my life - Losing all the great memories I have in the process. Very well executed.

I guess my favorite part was when Sniper's and Spy's minds merged. Meat Circus, anyone? It was pretty trippy.

Also what happened to poor Demo?! DAMN THAT CLIFFHANGER
>> No. 401
I'm so very happy that you updated this! So very happy indeed, especially after sitting in a hospital the entire day, hoping that my Dad wouldn't die on the operating table.

I love you. So very much.
>> No. 402
>>33

Oh, damn. D: I'm terribly sorry to hear that, but I'm glad my story could lift your spirits. Hope things get better for you.
>> No. 403
Not going to get tired of the surrealist imagery in this story.

This time in was especially pleasing.
>> No. 404
this had BETTER involve eyelanders.
>> No. 407
Two bottles of beer + this = A very VERY happy me.
>> No. 408
Updates! This is getting to be very tense! Wonderful chapter.

(Is it too nerdy that during the mind fighting between Spy and Sniper I stopped reading and put the OST for Inception on to play?)
>> No. 410
>>38

Shit, now you made me go back and do the same thing. 'The Dream is Collapsing' fits perfectly well for that seen that it's almost creepy.

Eximplode, wonderful as always. Like every other chapter expect more fanart out of me at some point. too damn good.
>> No. 411
>>38
>>39

You're right; it DOES fit that scene scarily well, especially when it builds up as things get worse, then stops suddenly, Spycho having been interrupted by Demo.

The funny thing about this, though? I haven't seen Inception. When that movie came out I was too busy preparing for my trip to the USA to go see it. Looks like I'll have to watch it now. :V
>> No. 414
My my my. This is simply DELICIOUS. I especially love the little humor-amongst-panic when Sniper mentions how his transformation might get too out of hand until he has "green skin and an inexplicable need to sunbathe." That made me giggle.

I simply CANNOT wait until the next chapter. I especially love how everyone's powers are evolving. Spy being able to bend light around himself is just BADASS.
>> No. 421
...I just read this whole thing in (almost) one go. I just. This... is so amazing. I tracked the fic down after spotting the fanart, and I have to admit, I wasn't sure what to expect. I more than half imagined this was going to be a long crack-fest. Not that I can't appreciate the occasional cracky morsel, but this is some damn quality fic right here.

Some superficial things, just in case you're editing: in ch. 14, in the midst of that crazy-intense Sniper-Spy mind-meld overload sequence, there's a singular/plural typo: "but he couldn’t tell if they WAS his screams or Spy’s." And earlier, as you're describing what's going on in Sniper's head as he watches RED Spy through that mental jumbotron (...in my brain it's a jumbotron) there are some spots where it gets unclear which spy you're talking about, when. Nothing major — for the most part you walked that fine line between being clear without being repetitive, but once or twice I had to go back to be sure I had it straight. To be fair, that might just be because I'm freaking exhausted right now, but I thought I'd point it out, just in case that's not it.

Anyway. Awesome plot and writing, all-around smooth characterization.... This is amazing, and addictive, and I am itching to know what happens next!
>> No. 422
>>42

Hey, thanks for the concrit! I didn't notice that little singular/plural error so thanks for pointing that out. I'll see about looking into the other issues you raised on the Livejournal copy as well.

Glad you enjoyed it regardless!
>> No. 438
Exi, you are truly a god of nightmarishly creepy mindfuckery. Spycho is an absolutely magnificent villain, and the scenes where he enters and manipulates his victim's mind never fail to entertain and scare me at the same time.
Just be careful not to give him too much screentime compared to the other BLUs. I hope the next chapter will include BLU Soldier, Demo and/or Engineer, because I don't think we've seen their superpowers yet.
>> No. 444
Wonderfully creepy work! The way you write action really drew me into the story for those last few chapters. I do agree with Lacy, though, that sometimes the action gets a bit confusing; occasionally I have to break the flow of the story to reread a paragraph wondering, "That sounded really awesome, but what the bloody hell just happened, and to who?"

Anyways, keep going!
>> No. 454
>>42
>>45

Thanks for the comments, anon. Sorry I didn't get back to you straight away, I've been visiting my fiance's grandparents, hence the Holiday Special that didn't happen as well. Sorry guys.

If you and Lacy could maybe send me an email showing the specific parts that're too confusing (just click my name), that'd be great. I'm always looking to improve, and I can update the Livejournal copy with a revised version.
>> No. 464
Oh my GOODNESS. Edge of my seat, man! Right on the edge of my seat!

I'm quite curious about Sniper's disability. Cripple was mentioned server times and it can't just be the lack of manly-stache.

When Babby!Demo came in I literally threw my arms into the air like a loon. I think I know what Babby!Demo's power it. Well, the idea slammed into my brain. I honestly went, "OH, OH OH NO! OH JEEZ!" What could be so horrible and frightening that you lock it away as soon as it appears? What's the scariest thing to a child, especially one who went through Demomans childhood? I'll tell you what. A child's imagination.

ohgodican'twait
>> No. 466
>>47

Actually, regarding your first question, it IS just the lack of manly-stache. Most people who're exposed to Australium end up looking like Saxton Hale and Radigan Conagher. Sniper was born with a natural genetic mutation which means he's immune to the transformative effects of pure Australium. And in Australian terms, this means he's either labelled a cripple, or his legitimacy is contested. The native Aborigines have the same mutation, hence the taunts of 'half breed'.

And for anyone who's curious; outside of TNI canon, I included this stuff to touch on Australia's nationalist past, and attitudes in the 1930's-1940's towards disabilities. No particular reason plot-wise. Just wanted to expand upon the fic's universe for no reason other than to make it more immersive. :3


As for your other question, I am saying absolutely nothing to confirm or deny. Sorry. Glad you enjoyed the chapter, anyhow. Working on Chapter 15 right now!
>> No. 468
My brain. Your brain. My bed. Now. Let the mind f*ck begin!
Seriously though...this is win. I'm loving every part of this, especially how Sniper was the one who won the battle of the minds.
But yeah, keep up the good work!
And I'm looking forward to seeing Demo battling the Blu Spy.
>> No. 475
I kept re-reading this over and over. Why do I have a feeling that Spy and Sniper are either going to have a Freaky Friday moment or are going to be completely synchronized? Either way, I'm interested.
Mfw Demo's babby imagination is going batshit.
>> No. 570
I keep reading this over and over again and each time I do I pick up on little things I didn't notice before and it's AWESOME
>> No. 590
I think my mind just orgasmed all over my skull from reading this! The image of the branch growing before him as he walked on it was amazing! Never stop writing.

Also the spy being Swiss really cracks me up because all I can think abou is huge glasses and swiss chocolate.Combine that with the Spy's snort and he was probably the biggest geek in the world. Swiss Spy is now headcanon.
>> No. 924
I know I shouldn't be checking for updates of this every day, but after having read all of the chapters to date I can't help myself.

Absolutely loving Sniper's dream scenes! The imagery I got from them are so beautiful that I wish my current artistic abilities could capture them.
>> No. 925
>>53

You'll be waiting a while, she recently answered a question about it on her t.umblr:

"Anonymous asked: Are you ever going to update the nucleus incident? :<"

"Probably. Eventually. But right now TF2 doesn’t hold much interest for me. I’m a bit depressed at the moment and I’m having problems doing things with large groups of people for any amount of time, so. Right now, no, I am not working on it.

In the future I probably will. But not now"
>> No. 926
>>54

Thanks.

I'll see if I can turn out some decent fan art of this fanfic anyways.
>> No. 955
Hey guys. I restarted work on Chapter 15 recently. Not sure if I can get a beta, but I might just put it out as it is.

I'm determined to get this thing finished, and maybe get back into the fandom. I miss this place, and I miss the people. And even though most of them are gone, I feel I owe it to those who remain to give TNI an ending. Not now, but hopefully sooner rather than later.

Thanks for bearing with me. If anyone wants to help me out or just talk, drop me an email.
>> No. 957
>>56
Not sure what all a beta entails, but I can spell and grammar check pretty good if you need that. Make sure sentences make sense, etc.
>> No. 962
OKAY, WHICH ONE OF YOU MADE THIS? http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/FanFic/TheNucleusIncident

As if I needed any more motivation to finish this thing. <3 Thankyou to whoever put the incredible amount of effort into it.
>> No. 963
>>58

I confess, I did it (under my TheToonGeekette handle on TVTropes). I figured it was about time it got a page, and I had a lot of spare time on my hands that day. Glad to see you're okay with it!
>> No. 964
This is one of the best fics I've ever read! Keep it coming!
>> No. 1032
I'm not gonna beat around the bush with you guys; I'm out of here, because I don't like the way Kumori has been handling things. So all of TNI's future chapters and any of my future fanwords are going to be on my t*mblr or livejournal.

eximplode.t*mblr.com (replace * with a u)

eximplode.livejournal.com

It's been real, you guys. Don't hesitate to contact me at all (eximplode.t*mblr.com/contact). I love every single one of you and I don't want you to forget that, but my time here has ended. Goodbye TF2chan. <3
>> No. 1037
Aww! That's too bad! I'm going to miss you!
>> No. 1038
Sad to see you leave the chan, catch you on the flipside ((AKA: hipstr))
>> No. 1064
Just FYI, this has been updated.
>> No. 2957
I know that some of you are going to hate me for bumping this up, but do any of you have the all the chapters saved? Eximplode deleted the livejournal account and I don't really know why. I really love this fic and curse myself for not saving it sooner.

I've been meaning to make some decent fanart of it for a while, but I can't with none of the earlier chapters to reference from.
I really want to draw out Sniper's dream from the earlier chapters.
>> No. 2960
http://www.mediafire.com/?c69cqf55gzd4zgi

I hope a .doc file is all right. All fifteen chapters, plus a couple of random snippits which don't fit into the main story.
>> No. 3156
For those not in the know, Eximplode has ceased working on this fiction. Though she appreciates everyone's enjoyment of the piece so far, she has become hounded and stressed and wishes for her other artistic endeavors to find appreciation.
There will be no further updates until she feels like it.
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