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Marine (Medic/Scout) (27)

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Title: Marine
Author: Ushiki
Genre: AU, science fiction, fantasy, smut
Rating: NC-17
Pairings: medic/Scout
Warnings: Forced sex, male pregnancy, kinky things
Synopsis: Humans tryied to reproduce other endangered races


-Chapter 1-

He opened his eyes when needle cut into his skin, sharp but not long pain made him shiver and moan in protest. A big black metal ring entered the new hole and stretched the skin with its weight. A woman in a black robe who made the piercing changed needles and rubbed the left side of his chest with a cotton-wool full of alcohol. The guy moaned louder when she pulled his swollen nipple and penetrated the toned skin with skillful moves. Another big ring pushed through the skin and made it bright red.
"Will you give him sildenafil or other drugs?" the woman said, making more holes. "It will be dangerous because of blood loss, but you can wait a few hours." The guy angrily looked up at the man in the left corner of the brightly lit white room. He wanted to say a lot to him but his mouth was full with a black round gag ball.
The man walked to them and opened the box on table. He got out headers for a machine which he brought a few minutes before.
"Do you like it?" He asked, stroking his small beard with a smug smile. "Ah, you can't speak." The man laughed and pulled the white hair on the boy's head and turned his face to the latex barrel he held. "That thing will arouse you better than drugs. Am I right, Miss Pauling?" He asked the woman who made the last ten piercings on his belly. She smiled and didn't say anything. That made the blonde boy even more angry, he panted hard and mumbled through the gag "Fuck you! And fuck her too!"
"What are you trying to say, boy?" The man asked with mocking tone. "How will we call our small undine? Dummkopf or little Scout?... Scout will be better," He put the machine on the wheeled table and changed the barrel on it. Then he moved the table close to the seat and forced the guy to kneel on table and sit on the machine. His slim body looked pale and almost glassy, his hair was wirey but shiny like silk - everything in his outlook was fairy-like, especially when he angrily looked at them with his blue eyes and black fringe. He was an undine, one of the dozen sea fairies who lived in this country. Extremely rare population. Most of people were afraid of them or looked at them as animals, even here, in reproductive laboratory, scientists humiliated them or liked to use them to fulfill their dirty wants.
The man forced the boy to bend over and slid his hand over his bony back. He opened his buttocks and began to spread his creamy hole with two fingers. "Looks like you're used to this, aren't you?" He smirked. "What a good stretch you have." He smeared gel over the latex head of the machine and moved boy's butt down on it. Switching machine on, the man laughed at the loud moan the undine made and slapped his small butt.
"Miss Pauling! Please look at him each 5 minutes until his belly won't wet. I'm going for eggs!"
The woman closed her instruments for the moment and looked at the poor boy who panted and moaned being tied to the sex machine. She looked back at the closed door and quickly came to the boy and started untying him. She cut off his gag and asked him with nervous whisper "Are you okay?" He nodded and looked at her with a questioning stare. "I'm going to save you from here," she said and stopped the motion of machine. He looked at her with fear and disbelief. "Don't be stupid," he replied and smiled slightly. "I can't be saved from this place, I will die alone without food and you will live in danger." She wanted to say more but a noise outside the door stopped her mid-word. The undine was tied, gagged, and bent over again. Miss Pauling switched machine with a sad sigh.
The man entered the room with a bottle of pink fluid. He put it on the laboratory table and asked the woman to warm it to 40 degrees. He then came close to the undine and touched his belly.
"Do you like my machine? Why, your little hole isn't opened yet?" He changed rhythm to maximum, pinching the boy's pierced nipples and groping his half hard member. The boy's moans became needy, his round face blushed and glistened with sweat. Small soft hands grasped corners of table while he rubbed his balls over the vibrating machine. His penis became harder and came out like a pink flower. The man smiled with a mad expression on his face and filled a compressor gun with warmed fluid.
"Do you know what is it, Scout?" He asked. The guy gazed at him with lazy dark eyes and looked away without interest. "It's undine's eggs which you will insert in your brood pouch. You should have noticed before that you have that small hole under the navel... it's your pouch, dear," The guy looked at him with a blank face. But his face changed with every second, like he suddenly remembered something. Something that made this information not so absurd. " Seahorses have the same pouches and you are the second undine who will fertilize eggs in an artificial habitat, so be ready to do that!" The machine pulled the guy's arms and arched him over the table. He cried in fair and thrust his hips which caused more friction to his anus and balls. "No, not that!" He thought in panic and looked how man stroked his oversensitive spot. He opened his hole with tip of compressor gun and started to fill him with the hot mass of micro eggs. His belly swelled in few seconds, boy moaned in pain but pleasure was too big that he cummed with hard thrusts. Man filled him with enormous mass of fluid. It leaked away but he put a finger in the hole and waited few minutes. Soon the boy calmed, he felt a strange bliss and looked up at scientist. He didn't noticed that his belly was growing with every seconds and small round curves of eggs were seen on his thin skin. The man stroked the boy's pregnant belly and pulled his finger out of his hole. A few minutes later the undine calmly slept on the laboratory coach.

(USER WAS BANNED FOR THIS POST)

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Uhhhhh...

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Now, I don't wanna say that the idea is bad, because it isn't. Idea's certainly interesting.

But just some things, like the exchange between Pauling and Scout, they just seem soap-opera-y. Unrealistic. And not in the 'you can get away with it because it's sci-fi' kind of unrealistic. Dialogue should always feel at least somewhat organic.

Also, shook my head at 'cummed'. I am almost completely certain that 'cummed' is not a word. At all. Even in slang. It just sounds like bad grammar. Like 'I did gone to the store'.

But that said, I would like to see where this goes.

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I have no idea what is happening here. I was having trouble keeping it together and then I got to this line:

"His penis became harder and came out like a pink flower."
I lost it. This is ridiculous. What is happening here? Why is Scout a fairie? Medic has a beard? I'm having a hard time understanding why this has to have TF2 characters in it at all, as it seems like you have a whole separate world here and the addition of TF2 characters just makes it incredibly silly.

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male pregnancy
Oh, GOD, yes.

Thisisgonnabegood.gif

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What the actual fuck am I reading?

Is this even a TF2 story?

...well, I always wanted Miss Pauling to be more involved in afanfic, so I guess I got what I wanted..sort of.

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I'm not sure whether to ban this person or not. The other comments OP has made around the chan are not helping their case.

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Not commenting on the content but please format. The big wall of text hurts my eyes.

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You know, I skimmed this, and it seems like a fic from any other site, except with modified names and a few sentences redone to fit the tf2 universe, kind of.

notice theres no real description of any of the characters such that they match up to their TF2 semblances.
The only things modified are some of the speech, like DUMKOFF.
This seems really out of place, and male pregnancy always makes me think of the "omgkawai im so awesome and underage" sort of people.

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He opened his buttocks and began to spread his creamy hole with two fingers.
MY SHIT. IT'S GONE. I LOST IT.

HOLY SHIT LOLING FOREVER.

Also underage b&.

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Oh my god, you guys, I keep checking this thread just to read your comments.

>>10 Especially this one.

You expect me to read that (apparently hilariterrible) textwall? Pfff. Just keep snarking it for me, my minions.

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GUYS

you all remember the LAST mpreg fic we had...

oh god why cat, why

its Surrogate, dummy

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>>9

I agree. Aside from hastily pasted-on labels of 'Scout' and 'Miss Pauling', this could have come from just about anywhere. It certainly isn't TF2. Hell, all those mentions of 'the man' and no mention of Medic?!

I honestly can't say anything complimentary about this fic, except that at least it's clearly written in English. Which may not actually be a good thing; if written in some other language, I might not have actually spent 40+ seconds of my life squinting at that wall of text.

Now I have a headache and a bad taste in my mouth. This fic seems to have magically given me a hangover.

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>>11
To save the eyes of the internet, I'll be copying and pasting my favorite quotes (that are not already mentioned) from this horrible abomination.

He opened his eyes when needle cut into his skin, sharp but not long pain made him shiver and moan in protest. (It's the first sentence, but still a gem.) His slim body looked pale and almost glassy, his hair was wirey but shiny like silk - everything in his outlook was fairy-like, especially when he angrily looked at them with his blue eyes and black fringe. He smeared gel over the latex head of the machine and moved boy's butt down on it. "Miss Pauling! Please look at him each 5 minutes until his belly won't wet [...]" (???????) The boy's moans became needy, his round face blushed and glistened with sweat. "Seahorses have the same pouches and you are the second undine who will fertilize eggs in an artificial habitat, so be ready to do that!" The machine pulled the guy's arms and arched him over the table. He cried in fair and thrust his hips which caused more friction to his anus and balls. "No, not that!" He thought in panic and looked how man stroked his oversensitive spot. (I know, I cheated, but hot damn, this entire fucking.... EVERYTHING needs to go down in history. FOREVER.) His belly swelled in few seconds, boy moaned in pain but pleasure was too big that he cummed with hard thrusts.
Caution: Do not look directly at the horrible quotes - common side effects to reading this fanfiction have been breaking out into hives; hair loss; trouble sleeping; explosive diarrhea; imploding eyeballs; and a distinct lack of faith in humanity. Please discuss things with your MEDIK before reading this anus-searingly bad f4nf1ct10n for teh LULZ.

Reposted (AGAIN) because of a formatting error.

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Proof that this wasn't supposed to be a TF2 fanfiction ever, and still shouldn't be. EVER.

http://community.live journal.com/_quaintnotion/745489.html

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>>17 I don't know whether to be surprised or happy that the poster didn't copy + paste the second half of what you found. Yikes.

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>>17

Well, good thing I already banned them forever, then.

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...would have been nice if the author at least bothered to read through his work to take out all the glaring errors.

Also, where the hell is this fic going? I got lost quite a couple of times while reading. What's with the fairies? What's with the sudden decision on Medic's part to impregnate Scout? How did he even get Scout there in the first place? A good fic would use suspense to create room for imagination, but not to baffle readers. This fic just reminds me of senseless porn fics, badly written in the author's haste to get to the "dirty" part, and utterly lacking in professionalism as well.

I think the author should either discontinue this fic or at least revise it before going further.

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>>16 Thanks, TwoRef, you just made my morning.

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>>17

Now that we know this is plagiarism on top of just outright trolling, I don't feel bad that this person is permabanned.

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this is really fucking funny tho

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Oh god, why would you necrobump this abomination, of all things. @.@

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>>26

Oh god, yes, why could you?

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The funniest thing about this entire story was the ban at the end. I wasn't expecting that.
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