Well now I feel bad for saying it so rudely. I should have just said it like the normal mediocre crit like I did when I mentioned the sniper being neglected earlier on, so don't beat yourself over it. I'm glad to be of help at least. I enjoy this story, a lot, And even if there /was/ at least one thing I didn't like, the greatness of the rest of the story would overpower it. I can't really think of any other way I can tell you that you could never fail as a story teller, and to keep writing forever.