Hey, it's you! Darkwhitewolf, right? It's nice to see you here! Though I can't really add much, I've already given you all the concrit I could think of, back in ff.net. Remember all the PMs we have exchanged? I'm sure the other posters can give you excellent concrit, though. There are so many great critics here, it's completely different from ff.net. Good luck with making your story the best it can be, I'm looking forward to the next chapters.