If anyone wants to proof read my stuff then they can drop me a line over Steam or at my Hipstr (angelcymry for both). Normally I'm not this bad but the only place I can really write these days is at work - not the best environment for prolonged spells of editing, some things slip through the gaps. >>5 Sorry, Anon but yes there are sad times ahead. >>6 I've taken your comments into account. Hopefully Chapter three will explain some things. >>7 Thank you Anon. Some of your changes are really good. Though your use of commas before conjunctions is a bit strange to me. I guess I was just taught it was one or the other.