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I was just thinking, earlier today, how much I wanted this story to update. And sure enough, I check to re-read what's been posted so far because it's just that good, BAM there's an update!

This fic is definitely my favorite of the chan. I've never gotten so invested in a story. I find myself cursing, laughing, groaning as I read and I love it.

My only little nitpick is that you consistently drop hyphens in compound words, which can muddle descriptions. Like, "paranoia induced" should be "paranoia-induced" and so on. That's the only example I remembered, but I'm fairly certain there were others.

That's an awfully minor thing though, certainly doesn't detract from my immense enjoyment. I'm looking forward to further updates!