>>27 Yeah, it's true, but the best way to do it is to do it quickly I think in this kind of scenario -- to startle one's audience out of complacency. And as for words, well words are only worth reading if they mean something or feel like it's going somewhere. Otherwise it's like wading through mud. A short piece no-one might not want to read, but they'll read it, even if it's by accident. There can be a nice middle ground, you know. And it was occupying it for a long time, now... yeah. Anyway, made my point, so I will just leave it there. Do love the gist of the fic and it really did hook me in at the start. Surprised it took someone so long to make a quality piece with the concept (or come up with the concept). It works really well with the original material.