Why the timeskip? Why not let the audience actually see the Medic fall in love with the Soldier in stages instead of just telling us via narrative? There's also some inconsistency with the tense and point of view. I think it may be better for the story to stick to the Medic's side of the story, and let him slowly try to figure out what the Soldier is thinking, and when he gets onto Soldier's wavelength, that's when the relationship starts developing.