WARNING: the following comment is tl;dr. I mean it, it's really f-ing long. Do yourself a favour and skip it if you don't like rambling and ~ opinions ~. I don't really know how to say this... I'm sorry, but I just can't keep reading this story. As I said before, there is too little canon to say that the characters are OOC, so this is just a matter of different personal interpretations. But the dissonance is so strong, it puts me off too much. My subjective problem with your characterization of Medic, Engie and Spy is simply that they are "too evil" to me, so it's a just matter of ethics rather than attitude as a whole, and I could with some difficulty buy it. I've read fics where Engie is a sadistic rapist, I can buy an extremely evil version of a character as long as their attitude as a whole resonates. But my subjective problem with your characterization of Heavy and Sniper is that their attitudes don't resonate at all. I just can't see them being such doormats. I mean, Heavy was just a child when he was deported with his family to what was effectively hell on earth; three months later, the Gulag was burned to the ground, all the guards tortured to death. Considering how common rape was in the Gulag, I always imagined that some guards probably either raped Heavy's sisters or tried to, which caused child!Heavy to go on a roaring rampage of revenge and kill them all in horrible ways and then destroy the whole place. Because of that headcanon, my mind just ouright rejects a portrayal of Heavy where he basically watches helplessly as a young girl is kidnapped, imprisoned in a hole, mutilated and repeatedly raped by 9 men himself include (sure, the rape is non-violent as she is mentally unable to say no, and he almost always asks this personal who is incapable to say no first, but rape is rape). All his protests are silenced with a look, and he acts as if there was absolutely nothing he could do about that. It took Angel nearly dying slowly and painfully in her own filth to get him to take a little action, and even then it didn't go past forcefully borrowing the Medigun for a couple of minutes and stopping raping her. Again, that's not to say your portrayal is OOC. There is like a 30 years gap between the Gulag and TF2, for all we know Heavy has repressed his memories of the time and would do anything to avoid reliving them, and Heavy's reactions in Meet The Medic could be interpreted as him being afraid of Medic. And I guess he could somehow convince himself that it's not rape if she doesn't say no, much like so many people seem convinced that sex with a woman who is too drunk to stand up is totally not rape. But my headcanon conflicts too much with his portrayal in this fic, I just can't read it. I tried re-reading Heavy's chapter a few times and everytime I kept wondering who that guy is, as surely the "real" (read: the one in my personal headcanon) Heavy would immediately go berserk and bring down hell to avenge Angel the moment he first saw her in the sickbay, seeing his sisters in her. I can buy a evil Heavy, but I could never buy a helpless Heavy. At this point even if he does bring hell down in future chapters of this fic, to me it would be too little too late. Then there is Sniper. He was born a farmer, but he took the initiative to go out on his own and become an assassin. In canon he is portrayed as an extremely straightforward and headstrong guy, who never hesitates to do what he feels is right (even when the world insists that what he feels is right, like say becoming a hit-man and casually murdering people, is actually very very wrong). His chapter says that he had to fight down the urge to punch Scout, and all I could think was "why wouldn't he at least tell Scout to STFU? More importantly, why would he not kick the shit out of Medic and Spy while he is at it?" The orders were to get rid of the girl, but (as far as he knows) they didn't specify how, so it wouldn't be unprofessional of him to get pissed at his teammates for deceiving him and picking such an unnecessarily horrible way to do it. If anything I'd say that his high standards and motto of professionalism would demand that he kicks their ass for being such unprofessional scum as to lie to their own teammate and massively overdoing their task. Why would somebody who prizes high standards and professionalism so much let Medic and Spy get away with basically fucking over their own teammate? Why would he allow them to lie to their other teammates too? I can't buy that Sniper didn't react violently to the reveal of Angel in the sickbay, and I can't buy that he didn't tell the truth to the guys who haven't figured out that Angel and the runway girl are the same person, let alone lie to them himself and say that he doesn't know where Angel comes from. Evil I can buy, helpless no. Sure, telling them the truth would have caused discord among the group, even potentially caused them some losses against the enemy team; but it would have been the professional thing to do, as employees deserve not being lied to. And if their boss had a problem with their poor performances on the battlefield then professionally it's neither Sniper's fault nor his problem, and she could mostly solve the matter by firing Medic and hiring a replacement. Also, telling them the truth could have convinced them not to rape her, as they would have been aware that what they thought was harmless sex with a supernatural creature was actually rape with a brain-damaged and mutilated slave who was their acquaintance; Demo did stop after he got a hunch of the truth. Granted, Sniper himself still raped her while knowing the truth, even making her use her mutilated fingers inside of him (which is another thing my headcanon outright rejects, as I believe he has infinitely more self-control than that), but it was much rarer and he eventually stopped. Simply by telling his teammates the truth, he could have made a HUGE difference. Sniper is a hardcore mercenary and an extremely active man, but he would rather weep over her situation than do the barest minimum to help? It's not impossible that, past the guns and knives, Sniper is really just a spineless wimp. His phone calls with his parents could easily be used as basis to support your portrayal of him as a man who means well but ultimately lacks the guts to take a real stand. So, again, I can't call it OOC. But the dissonance is staggering. So, conclusions. You are extremely talented at writing beautiful phrases and conjure evocative images. You can efficiently weave a good story, as shown when you had Engie lie in his chapter, and the readers first didn't figure it out and later recognized that it made perfect sense. You can skillfully go from writing a heavily-accented interviewee to another different heavily-accented interviewee to the flowery mental rambling of an educated brain-damaged person. You are also good at portraying genuinely creepy minds and moods. Objectively, your story is good. But I just can't get past your characterization. And even if I could, the "helpless doormat" is one of my least favourite character archetypes ever, one I have nothing but scorn for. Since the characters in this fic are either insanely evil, or oblivious, or horrifically abused victims whose best hope is euthanasia, or candidates for spine surgery... Even if this were an original story rather than fanfiction, I still wouldn't want to keep reading it. Conclusion-conclusion: this fic is good but not for everybody, least of all me. I wish you the best with future chapters, though :)