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Oh look... its progression!

And its our strange bird lady.

Ok, I know why the bracketed dialogue is there. But don't like it. It breaks the flow. Actually, I'm not a fan of the use of brackets but then thats another pet gripe.

This has more motion. The idea she is becoming something is stronger, but I feel now that I have more of an idea of whats going on, Im feeling that this is part of a crescendo - something that is part of a larger missing piece. I don't know if I like it because Im expecting something that isn't going to happen yet? Am I reading too much into this?

Also, I will add, that because I feel that its part of something a little bigger, its missing the core elements of what the start is. In saying that, its getting earthed. Its becoming more real, breaking that ethereal link to the mind. And its a little jarring.

Technically, theres something there that's not quite right. I need to think on this to work out what that is. *muses*

There might be no reason for Spy to involve Medic except he might be just a prick. I dunno.

Meanwhile, god Im tired. Read this, listen to Requiem, and now I will have strange dreams. Awesome!