THAT WENT COMPLETELY NOWHERE. Congratulations on writing the absolute most boring piece of fiction ever read. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dramatic_structure Read it. Learn it. There are portions of a piece of literature that serve different roles. Your story had none of these except for an introduction, and then the story simply floundered through anecdotes. There's no conflict. There's no drama. There's no anything. Even Seinfeld -- a show about nothing -- had some sort of conflict within every episode. I'm glad that some people could find the interactions interesting, but this was essentially an extended experiment in writing in different dialects. The classes didn't even act much differently. There are a thing called *tactics* and *obstacles* in drama. Every class had the same obstacle, just used a different tactic. One obstacle does not a conflict make, and one tactic does not a scene make. They all essentially acted the exact same because they had the same goal. You say you take crit to heart, then immediately claim that you've written it all and that you don't plan on changing anything. Next time you write something, EDIT YOUR WORK instead of letting crit go in one ear and out the other. I'm not bitching because I don't like it; I'm bitching because this is, by definition, bad fiction.