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Good and well-characterized, as always; the only concern I would like to note is that you seem to overuse phrases such as "the younger man" and "the older man" instead of names. Perhaps it's just a pet peeve of mine, but I noticed those phrases cropping up a lot. I went back and read a few of your other one-shots, and noticed a few uses of phrases like these, but they seemed overused in this piece in particular.