I reeeeally recommend you find a beta. The grammatical and formatting errors got in the way of me really following the storyline. There aren't even that many big problems, just ssssooo many little problems. Nothing that proofreading won't fix, though. The story itself is alright, PWP at its simplest. Neato diction, sexy imagery, all around pretty neat. No complaints about the story itself to be had. Just -- get yourself a beta so that it can be properly understood.