This story seemed disjointed to me. The discussion bits and the porny bits are just not tied together all that well. The transition between them felt like that awkward moment in a speech when time is running out and you've got to move onto the next subject, but you haven't finished up with the first part, and your audience probably wouldn't be impressed if you said, "And now for something completely different." I still enjoyed it, but you're capable of much better.