That being said, if you want someone to tell you what needs to be different in order for the fic to be more cerebral, start with the prose. I disagree with >>64's statement that the narration is consistent for a traumatized person. I noticed in the last chapter and other chapters that you often describe Pyro's body with words like "sweet heat" and "quivering folds," even though the fic is from Pyro's 3rd-person POV. You said earlier that many transmen refuse to let others even see their vaginas, so why would Pyro, while being raped and gang-raped, think of his own private parts in such a gratuitous way? If Pyro was with Frank or any consensual lover, it might've worked. If it was from Engie's POV, it would at least be in-character. But it's neither. I admit that these kinds of phrases do heighten the pornographic elements of the fic, but at the expense of characterization. And gratuitous sex at the expense of good characterization is the mark of non-cerebral porn.