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Brill. I. Ant.

Yay! An update!

... eagerly awaiting the next one.

It's just the journalist in me, but I noticed that you use periods at the end of quotes instead of commas ("...until I feel you are ready." Medic crooned softly..." instead of "...until I feel you are ready," Medic crooned softly..."). I don't know if this is just a writing style or a quirk or something (I, personally, use dashes instead of semicolons). I've noticed it in other places, and I don't want to sound nitpicky, but I just thought I'd mention it.

Anyways, thanks for the update, and please keep them coming!

Captcha was 'Assemble Louis.' I am going to call the Scout, Engineer, and Sniper, as the human centipede, 'Louis' from now on.