I am going to straight-up tell you to ignore the post above mine. Formal writing =/= fanfiction, and formal writing sure as hell =/= how people talk, and considering this is all being spoken by Engineer himself, all those suggestions are just wrong. There are more rules for how the hell to write out numbers than there are numbers that exist. CrazedGunman, brush up on your formal writing rules before trying to correct someone else. This is fucking great. The first person perspective is so perfect for the amicable, gregarious Engie and the slow, detailed way he's speaking is spot-on. I love this. The formatting is a bit fucked, but the grammar is just fine -- colloquial where it needs to be. Contact me on tumbles if you want a beta. I would really like to help you touch this up and help it continue.