I'm sorry to say, it's not very comprehensible. My brain was so hard at work simply trying to figure out what was going on that I couldn't actually enjoy they story. I had to go back again, with the advantage of hindsight, and study the text just to figure out what happened. I think it has mostly to do with narration. It's fallen into the Dramatic Vaguely of Vaguely Dramatic Drama, wherein the narrator simply spews an abundance of poetic imagery without taking time to connect the scenes together, or illustrate their relevance to the story, and whilst failing utterly at giving specifics necessary to grasp the story easily. What you end up with is something that sounds pretty and makes no sense whatsoever. The other thing is organisation. Things are just out of order, and some things are missing entirely--I just didn't have the information I needed when I needed it. How am I supposed to make sense of a description of Sniper's death before you've told me that he's dead? For that matter, how am I supposed to make sense of a description of Sniper's death when you don't include his death in the description? Somehow, he got from being upset in an alleyway to having a bullet in his brain later on, with only the most dramatically vague suggestions as to how. You've got similar problems in almost every element of the story: Sniper exhibits characteristics of dementia for reasons not explained until the end of the story; Spy has become The Pianoman for reasons not explained until the end of the story; the simple fact that The Pianoman is Spy doesn't come clear until the middle of the story... You've got to tell us things.