Now, for clarification, that last exclamation was Soldier, from the other side of the base; from the other side of the very large base and it still sounded like he was right up to their collective eardrums. This line jarred with me a bit - I don't think you need to specifically state that the shouts are being clarified. Why not have Scout or Demo just look at each other and know that the last yell is from Solider all the way from the other side of the base, since he does like a good shout and everyone is very familiar with the sound of his voice by now. But that's just a personal initial thought! I do like the set up of this though, the dialogue especially, and will definitely read more when you put it up.