I like the fics, Lightnings-Shadow. I think you'd do well to have less of NotTim internal-monologuing, though; stuff like this seems way too self-aware: NotTim paced back and forth furiously in his (not his) room. His candy cane had long since been sucked away, and even though he wanted to go get another, he just couldn't. Asking for more sweets, more treats, would make him look ungrateful for what he had been given and he'd be saying that what Engineer had gifted him with wasn't enough for him, and he'd look like a greedy little Spy that was never satisfied with anything and Engineer would regret giving him any of the candy cane in the first place. He could not have the candy canes unless Engineer said he could. I'd be happier with something like "He really wanted another candy cane, but Engineer had already left", because what's so SUPER CUTE about the character (to me) isn't the painful and constant self-criticism, it's the fact that he's just the most insecure spy ever. He just doesn't go get another candy cane, and that's that, no whining. NotTim took two steps forward, grasped the handle so tight that the bones in his fingers creaked, and he jerked the door open. And it didn't budge. He pulled again. It still didn't open. NotTim blinked. Then he realized the problem and squeezed his eyes shut in humiliation. He turned the handle, and then jerked the door open. This is more of what I love about the character. It really gels with one trillion dicks' work (OP and sequel) -- he's a good spy! He just fucked up and then didn't know what to do. This is what gives him such wide appeal; I do that shit all the time. Also, I just want to thank anon for posting the original chat log. I read (and skimmed) most of it, and it was really interesting to see how you all took a bizarre in-game encounter and created a character. It was the closest thing I'm ever going to get to a Writer's Workshop filled with videogame nerd homos.