>>46 I don't imagine it was meant to be comedy, but when the main love interest's name sounds like Pee and you've got Snoipeh shouting about more pee in the back of your head, you start to see potty humour in places you shouldn't. Anyway, Buttons, I will have to agree that this isn't my favourite installation on this story. It just wasn't very satisfying. It lacked focus. You were jumping around from idea to idea, some of which seemed unnecessary or at least out of place [I definitely would have told this in two three installments,] and you really didn't stay on any one thought long enough for us readers to really get into the situation. Heavy shit went down and I didn't feel a thing. But it’s not as if you’ve ruined the story forever. I’m still going to shit my pants the next time I see an update here. Just remember, in the future; slow down, take things one at a time. And give Red and Pi some more character development. They're starting to deflate.