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A couple mistakes in there.

quiet - quite faucet - facet
There was some awkward wording in there too. But I like this, and in the interest of you writing more polished work, I feel obliged to offer my services as a beta. Email's up in the email field, should you choose to accept my offer.

It weird, but this is actually the first time I can remember reading about a Spy having a gun to someone's dick. I also like the drama tension that comes when you take away respawn.