29 With all due respect, you have no idea how upsetting this piece would be for a transgender reader. Also, as detailed and thoughtful your criticism is, this is the internet. Not just the internet, but a fanfiction for a computer game. It's not meant to be Pulitzer prize winning prose. Perhaps you should take your skills and apply them to the real world - I'm sure you would make a great editor for a publisher or a published author. This isn't meant to be spiteful or angry. More apathetic and possibly slightly amused. 32 That's not an accidental thing at all. Every other class I can see as possibly being a real person, with real feelings and real thoughts. Demo is constructed in such a way that I just don't feel that with him. Same with Saxton Hale - they are such obvious caricatures that I just can't make them breathe. I mean, come on. He has a severe disability, he has chronic alcoholism, and Jesus Christ he's Scottish black man. It's like Valve went "Well shit, all our characters are pretty average. Let's add some diversity to our classes, but instead of giving everyone something different, let's just make one REALLY fucked up character." I mean, seriously.