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>>27 Sorry bout that.

>>28 I wanted to make him as placid and blank as possible so that when he finally realises he's not just someone's piece of ass, it's jarring.

Obviously I failed at that, and I'll have to work on it a bit better. Any crit is helpful, although I should point out I'm still new to actually writing TF2 stuff. (For an audience at least.)

I'll just slink back to lurking for now.