>>17 "Oh gee, I forgot TF2 was in the 50's right? With Spy's watch that can turn him invisible and the Engineer building machines capable of doing teleportation, I wonder why they weren't so advanced at the time to build cellphones /sarcasm." This is the same universe where stairs were invented by Abraham Lincoln in the 1800's and the phone that Miss Pauling uses in the director comic looks less advanced than one of the cell phones from the 1980's (which could have doubled as a melee weapon). They almost certainly didn't have modern cellphones, despite all the other technological advancements they've made. Not really a big deal in the scheme of things, but a valid question if it's confusing to someone. "In the end, this is AU, why should I follow canon?" Either follow canon or don't, that's your decision, but if you're not going to follow canon, you should show a bit more of how your AU is different from the in-game universe. Set up the world you see for us so that we can see it too. "And since they are in human form, I don't get why Heavy fingers would be deformed." His fingers aren't necessarily deformed, but he is a big guy and big guys tend to have large hands and large fingers. I'm a girl and my hands are thicker than most, so sometimes I have trouble with pressing the buttons on my cellphone, especially on the QWERTY key pad. "I wanted to do a fun fic for all to read, but I guess if I wasn't educated since little to learn English, I can't have that privilege." Honestly, the fact that you're not a native English speaker isn't the problem. Plenty of native speakers on here need betas because they've made some ridiculous errors too, in fact, probably more glaring than any you've made. But a beta would be able to point out where you need to clarify things and any place where other readers might become confused. I've been writing fan-fiction for over 12 years and I still need constructive criticism to improve my writing (tighten up the plot, fix grammar errors, clarify anything that might be confusing to people from a different culture). Seriously, don't take this stuff so personally. You have good ideas, they just need some work on execution. Keep writing, keep improving. I would love to see what you come up with next. BTW, it was my story that got taken down for CP. I'm working on fixing it now. May or may not reappear on the chan. May need a beta. Anyone interested?