> Oh don´t misunderstand me please. My first language isn´t english, so it may occure that the way i sometimes say things straight out seems to be rude and all. Which i don´t mean. So far i know no one is a professional writer on this board. But than again, i may ask you, if this is the first time your writing a fiction, why don´t you start slow with a thread in workshop? In workshop you get much positiv comments which help to improve your writing style and to maybe grasp the characterisation of a character more. And i´m really sorry if i now seem to be snipish if i say this, but if Chell isn´t such a social person in your opinion, does that not to imply on all others. So far as i know her survival was until now up to the observation of her environment and the recognition of threads which may occure. So the lack of description how the others reacted to her, seems just careless to me. And i know people will hate me for this. Chell went through the desert for days and passed out through Soldiers hit... I really would say Medic should be there in the room. Besides of a sunstroke, beeing dehydrated and having maybe some wounds she could have a concusion. (Man we talking about Soldier he could slap the shit out from Bisons if he wants it.) I will now be silent, but you should know that i will follow this fiction with great interest and so far i like the concept.