Considering that some of this Fandom's most beloved writers, as well as the official comics, do not use accents, I really don't think they are necessary. They can add character, and some authors find them fun to write, but they aren't necessary. I understand your problem with English sentences. My own first language tends to have very long sentences, and if I try a literal translation into English the result is criticised by native English speakers as convoluted. Regardless of how well-structured they are, if you are writing in English, I recommend using short sentences. Also, less unnecessary details, less colons and semi-colons, and more full stops. And, in general, you really need to watch your tenses. For example, this sentence: Then, he thought, calculating the next shot – wanting to hit the Sentry, he had to adjust his angle for the suddenly heavy wind – why care? While he pondered the idea, consciously nurturing these terrible feelings, the assuredness of being a target of such despises, such hate – at a very point where Spy wants to kill him, to make him pay – was slowly changing that eerie irritation inside his troubled mind every time he sees Spy, making it blossoming into something else, into bliss It would sound better if you write it like this: Then, he thought, calculating the next shot to hit a sentry through heavy wind - why care? He pondered the idea, consciously nurturing those terrible feelings. The assuredness of being a target of such despise, such hate – to the point where Spy wanted to kill him! – was slowly changing that eerie irritation he felt every time he saw Spy, making it blossom into something else, into bliss. Don't give up writing! This second version may still be flawed, but it's a HUGE improvements over the first version. You are definitely getting better :) I'd agree that a third version of this fic would be overdoing it. Better to start something new, I think; I suggest a short ficlet, it's much easier to practice and to focus on any potential flaws if the story is short. But don't give up writing fics. You have already shown that you are capable of accepting criticism and learning from it, it would be a pity to throw in the towel. Just remember: short sentences, less unnecessary details, watch your tenses. Good luck! :)