>>148 No, they're saying that if an author writes a rape fic and then gets upset by a comment like >>145 , they should try writing something else for a while. I definitely agree with >>146; As for the actual story. The original one shot took my breath away, and I love it. The rest is acceptable and your errors are understandable. I look forward to the finishing up of this fic (here I'm assuming that it's close to done, but I could be wrong) and what you write in the future.