>>122 Hey, it's 121 here. Your story is having a great start, and a really good reason and explanation for why there would be a female in the BLU Team. The only constructive criticism I have to provide is that the thoughts are somewhat confusing because it looks like the rest of the text, so perhaps, if you wish to, you could use apostrophes 'like this' or have them in italic. I'm really liking it so far, and hope to see the second part. Meanwhile, you just nailed one of my fantasies with the opposing Team rape bit.