>>10 The physical sensations are quite different, but really, pain tolerance of this sort is always mostly psychological, anyway. If you've got the tools to get along with a knife or a bullet in places where it doesn't belong, tearing you up from the inside, or whilst burning alive or reduced to a pulp with a shovel, or dying and being brought back to life, then you can probably use those tools to deal with intense discomfort in the ass or cock. Mind, that wouldn't protect you from harm to your pride, or your sexual identity, or any number of other sacred concepts that people for some reason choose to associate with their naughty bits. It's very possible for these otherwise hardened mercenaries to feel the physical pain of an injury more acutely simply because the nature of that injury dings their psyche in a less protected areas. Spy, for example, could potentially have a terribly difficult time handling the unpleasantness on his junk, not for the sake of the pain itself, but because that's not how sex with Sniper was supposed to feel. War doesn't usually prepare you to have your romantic aspirations torn up and rubbed in your face. - Anyway, since you asked, I felt like the story got a wee bit rushed towards the end. I do the same thing in my writing, so I'm always sure to set aside a special revision session for adjusting the pacing near the end. Usually that does the trick. - Your Spy doesn't really sound that much like Spy, in fact, he sounds like you. Listening to his response clips before you write him might help you to get into his character, and if it doesn't, you can always have someone who writes him well help you to revise his dialogue. - If you don't have a grammar nazi beta, you should get one. There are a number of little surface errors, mostly in syntax and punctuation. It's not as if they render the story unreadable, but even little distractions can bitch up your momentum, if the reader notices while they're reading.