>>9 You do realize that one of the purposes of -posting- fic and art on the chan is to receive critique, right? And that posting things on the internet in general is just -asking- for commentary, including personal opinion? >>1 stubs, it's true that rape!Engie is pretty common, but at least you've admitted in the writing that that's what it is instead of taking the cheap cop-out of the rape-is-love trope. I will definitely give you credit for that, and your writing style really is pretty good. It has a good flow that's easy to read, and the grammar and spelling are great. You're also doing a good job of building up the tension. My only real complaint is how incompetent Spy seems. It was really no challenge at all for Engie to capture him, and Spy, being very good at what he does should, in my mind at least, put up a real fight and prove more difficult to wrangle (no pun intended). Just something to keep in mind, but I encourage you to keep posting, because overall this is pretty good. And, I hope you get some more crits and -thoughtful- comments instead of just being spammed by the rapidly growing population of increasingly vapid anons.